Britt! ( F C D )
at 2007-03-01
How powerful, Stephen. This is just absolutely beautiful. The imagery in outrageous. You've given me chills :)
Shattered Heart♥ ( F P C D )
at 2007-03-01
Wow great job! i really like it a lot. it flowed so nicely. And i really like what you wrote about! 5/5
~Kristina
Jonda Beth ( F P C D )
at 2007-03-01
Aww.how sweet...i loved it...5/5
::TheFireInMyEyes:: ( F C D )
at 2007-03-01
Aw this was a beautiful little poem! I like the whole idea of "lighting the wick again", It's really cute lol. Nice flow too. 5/5
marcella
in.need.of.a.lucky.charm ( F P C )
at 2007-03-01
You said it all, short, but sweet and straight to the point. well done hun
much love and many kisses,
bex
Mo ( F P C D )
at 2007-03-02
Stephen, I am always blown away by the fact that you are only 16 and yet you're writing things like this - its amazing. Hope you're getting an A++++++ in English!!! :) Good job. I enjoyed it.
Brittney Schmelter ( F P C D )
at 2007-03-02
Yes very sweet and it created a great image in my head. Though I think you should acutally set up some stanza and put in some grammer:
Resonating candlelight
That ebbs and flows just like the sea
Making me remember that
The two of us were meant to be
Filling through the atmosphere
With light that flickers -- dim...
Searching for a match
So I can light the wick again...
Ta da! if you don't capitalize and puncuate or whatever it makes your work look sloppy and it seems as if you just threw it together in a few seconds. Make it look as good as it sounds.
Great rhyming and flow.
5/5
B Hawley ( F C D )
at 2007-03-22
In NO WAY do you write like a 6 year old. This was an excellent piece of work! The revised version was nearly like the original accept in the way your lines were organized....that just comes from experience. Age knows no limits on talent!
Don't let anyone get you down! if you are writing like this at 16.....world watch out!
Excellent!
b.h. 5/5
MezmeRyz ( F P C D )
at 2007-03-23
Aww that was soo sweetand cute..lol very well written..short but fulfilling. keep it up! x
Rachel ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-01
To be so young you sure are talented. I love this cute little poem. Although short, it got the point across. It flowed well and the structure and word choice were good. Excellent job on this!
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