Comments - Killed me With a Fantasy

ChANeL ( F C ) at 2007-03-28

I really like it 5/5 check out my stuff

Ashleigh Skye ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-28

Wow I loved this poem.. just like everyone else it reminded me of a song. Perfect, I dont typically like thoes kinds of poems but somehow all your words made it magical. I could feel all the love sadness and even a little bit of anger in this poem, but nothing was out of place or too much. Nice flow as well. I'm going to vote for this poem to participate in the weekly contest cause I think it has a shot.

*Elemental Versifier* [Omar Bac ( F C D ) at 2007-03-28

Damn man!! amazing!! so full of feeling!!!!!!!! 5/5 from me....an incredibly great poem...

Hate|Love ( F C D ) at 2007-03-29

Loved it! It was absolutely amazing. So strong and full of emotion. Loved it. My fav parts were:

You held my hand] (You let it go)
[You promised me](Each promise: Broke)
[You said you loved me](Now, you don't.)
[You said you'd hold me](Now you won't.)

I'm losing air, it's hard to breathe;
The water's creeping up on me.
Each breath I take may be my last...
(I'm going down... I'm sinking fast.)

They were wonderful.. Great job.

Keep it up
&& Take care! :)

♥ leanne ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-30

I break apart with every word.
Divert your eyes so YOU aren't hurt.
Don't care for me, I will be fine...
(There goes my "Once upon a time...")

This was my fave stanza, stuck in my head more than the others, the whole poem flowed well and the imagery was great!! Well done on this its a beautiful write 5/5

Jonda Beth ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-30

I love this poem...why?...because I love it when poets use metaphors to characterize the meaning of the poem... I especially liked
*I'm sure I'm gonna sink below
-- there's nothing I can do.
I'm running out of oxygen...
(It's all because of you.)
It's the perfect ending...5/5

Hawkeye ( F C D ) at 2007-04-03

I liked the title and the first stanza was great, same to all the others. 5/5 and keep up the good work.

Rhonda {xoxo} Elizabeth ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-05

I love this poem... and i can relate to it too... the wording is great and the flow is amazing. there is sorta a rhyming scheme, but it needs a little help... but all in all 5/5

Nicole ( F P C ) at 2007-04-06

5/5 such a beautiful and sad write. its an amazing piece of work.

Espoir*failed ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-09

I loved the bit in brackets and i think having no set rhyming scheme seems to help things seem more raw somehow, dunno how :P but anyway i think this was a really deep powerful poem, i wish i could write like this *grinds teeth with envy* hmmm bye now

<3SoSickOfTears<3 ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-11

I frikken LOVED this!
Such a great opener and from there it just kept getting better and better.
The flow was flawless, the imagery wonderfully done and I didn't want this to end.
You did a great job with this!

redscream at 2007-04-13

Awsome job! it is so...real-that's all i can think!

debbylyn ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-14

Really like the feel of this piece....flow is excellent...vivid imagery and nice rhyme scheme.
I particularly like the way you did this verse....


[You held my hand] (You let it go)
[You promised me](Each promise: Broke)
[You said you loved me](Now, you don't.)
[You said you'd hold me](Now you won't.)

well done....5/5 All the best, Debbie

Sarah Ann ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-16

Very powerful and amazing poem.

Bloody Tears ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-21

Wow excelent poem! luved it....i mean its deep! its sad and its just makes me go..wow!! great job!

Anonymous Angel ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-23

Hey,
awesome poem, its so deep and full of emotion, the first stanza was really good, its like stuck in my head right now..
keep up the good work =)
5/5
kisses stephanie

Sorefromreality ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-02

Amazing.

i can see it must be a song. bravo.
the rhythm was great, and all the words were perfectly flowed together from wut i see.
the raw emotion is there and i love the way u wrote it.

love ya lots,
sore

cowgirlstar26 ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-03

It make a good song :) I liked it, im not a huge fan of this style but it worked.

Abused101 ( F C D ) at 2007-05-03

Wow this is excellent this is so good...... How do i nominate it?

Abused101 ( F C D ) at 2007-05-03

Wow this is excellent this is so good...... How do i nominate it?


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