honeypot ( C )
at 2007-04-22
Hi,
I see you in the message forums and wanted to see some of your work. It s refreshing! You really have your own style, I thinkthat you words would sound great to music too - maybe rap?
Keep up the good work, I will be reading more of your poetry :-)
Honeypot x
Kaila ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-22
Well Stephen I think this poem expressed a lot of emotion! I think you did a grand job at this poem. I loved it. The rhythm/flow was a tad off but that's alright your expression took away from that. This poem showed a great deal, of love.
I need your face to be in peace,
I need your being to be complete;
I need your voice to sleep at night,
so I can, once more, feel alive
^^ my favorite stanza I loved it and the flow was amazing and it all just fit perfectly! Nice job
xoxo kaila
Andrea Sunny ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-23
This is a creative and heartfelt piece. I don't find it odd at all, I felt it to be a very heart gripping and touching poem...however, may "I" just say to "you", that when using the words I and you or your so many times, it can come across to the reader as a repetitious nightmare....when dropping those, it can enhance your poem to greater beauty and express the elegance that you are trying to express..just some food for thought...
Peace love and light
Andrea
Sunny
Anonymous Angel ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-23
Hey,
a very creative and nice poem, you just use 'I' alot, but it doesn't bother me..
well i comment alot of you poems today and i think that you're an amazing writer, you truly have talent, keep up the good work and good luck with everything =) 5/5
kisses stephanie
Amanda
at 2007-04-23
Hey.. this poem is amazing and i know, i can tell it comes from true life experience doesnt it? I am very happy to actually read something that comes from the heart. You are truly talented and i hope you take it with you always....
Vanessa ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-23
I bet this comes from something you actually went though. i almost feel this though your written words. the flow was good, nicely written, you have an amaxing talent, to put things in a way that most people wouldn't think of. 5/5
Mia ( F P C D )
at 2007-04-29
Wow, I love this poem, it reminds me of what I going through at the moment, in a way. You have an amazing talent.
JoshuaDalay-on ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-04
Damn poetry is a good way to express your feelings. I didn't find this odd at all and you wrote it beautifully. You described it so that we can picture in our minds your feelings. Great job
cheers, josh
xThatxBoyxIsxBeautifulx ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-06
Well done. Kinda hard to follow along with.
The flow was a bit shaky. Well done though.
Very powerful. God Bless 5/5
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at 2007-05-29
I can relate to this poem. very very true the words just flow. i think you have a real gift. great job!
Miranda
at 2007-06-11
I actually really like it...and i don't think its odd......i do want to kno where do u get all of the beautiful and meaningful words u use...do they just come to u or what???
Tiffany
at 2007-06-18
I love it , it was amazing , you could feel the emotion behind the words .
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