Wallace ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-08
Excellent poem superbly done. It was a joy to read from start to finish, love it, keep it up.
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-08
Illuminati
So much sadness and pain in this piece. So heartfelt. Reading this brought tears to my eyes. The imagery is superb. Your poetry always moves me. Something about this one really got to my heart. Excellent job.
Maybe, it was just
one too many
unspoken whisper,
one too many unseen teardrops
that left the two of us infidel,
to fall apart,
and become the lost pieces
of Love's incomplete puzzles
I really hope those pieces come together again.
Excellent write.
Take care your friend Cindy
*♥Chelsey♥* ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-09
Illu, this poem reminds me of something I'd hear read at a coffee shop. I could picture me drinking coffee and you on stage reading that with such a deep and sad tone in your voice...at least thats how I read it...this was amazing...I love your choice of words, unlike many other poets you don't use common words which I LOVE!....as usual I give you credit for this amazing work!
Chels
GrammaConcept ( F P C )
at 2007-05-09
.......Deeply Touching........Beautifully Rendered......
debbylyn ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-09
Beautifully sad...hauntingly romantic....a joy to read, with awesome metaphors.
"Cracks on the wall have grown too long
letting me watch the twilight crawling through
to become a reminder of your smile "
^ I find these lines so sad...sleepless nights...lingering visions of a lover's smile...
"And as your brilliance lingers on the lips of Dullness
in the ocean of crystallized drips of emptiness
my voice forging with numbness."
^No words to describe...I picture one so despondent over loss that even the poet's pen is at a loss to capture the depths of despair felt in the soul...the word form falls short.
The ending lines are perfect....that which we all seek...a love to fill in our missing pieces...
"the lost pieces
of Love's incomplete puzzle"
Brilliant and so filled with longing....loved it! All the best, Debbie 5/5
[ Praised by : janis krumins ]
Lucy The Lucililly ( F P C D )
at 2007-05-14
Your poems are so deep, so many meanings and the fact that you can piece it all together like that is really something special, keep writing :)
Tonya
at 2007-05-20
It has been too long! I absolutely loved this piece and Im looking forward to reading more much more....love ya!
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