Comments - Tears on a Keyboard

SecludedSerendipity ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-24

Awww. This was just incredibly sweet to read. I like how strong the emotions were.

"He knows exactly [whats] in her heart,
That her love for him is surely true,
He doesn't want for them to part,
But feels [theres] nothing he can do."

^^ The words bracketed are missing an apostrophe. ;]

Nice job.

luke at 2007-05-24

It really helps in love because i need a poem for my first date

*Gem* ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-24

"He knows exactly what's in her heart,
That her love for him is surely true,
He doesn't want for them to part,
But feels there's nothing he can do."

Sods law isn't it.
You find the man/woman of your dreams and fate has other idea's...
Excellent rhythm m'dear, was a joy to read
5/5
*Gem*

becca bee ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-25

Awww, this is soo sad.. i absolultely LOVE the title.. very original.. the flow and rhymes once again were great, the only thing i think that could improve this poem is to tell readers why someone who was in love and knew the other person loved them back would leave them...unless you want us to think about it .. then i gues its okay lol.. but i dont understand why anyone would do that :/

Jenni Marie ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-25

This is beautiful...
Flow is flawless throughout, emotion is clear for the reader to see, and the opening is very powerful, really dragging the reader in with each stanza there after getting better and better.

xxSnow AngeLxx ( F C D ) at 2007-05-25

Awww....so beautiful,but sad....though well written......u've portrayed the emotions well thru this 1....very powerful start n so is the ending..n the flow was al fair..i loved the emotions it held n the way u've penned it..
Kp writing!
xxPoojaxx

kit-kat girl ( F C ) at 2007-05-25

Aww this is a verry sweet poem!!! Well written. I like the title too!
peace

BreeAnna ( C ) at 2007-05-26

I LOVED IT. It is amazing. wow. thats all I can really say.. I dont see anything wrong. great job. 10/10 :)

.K.i.T.t.Y. ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-26

Awww. this was splendidly sweet. i absolutely love it. And thanks for the comment. It was good enough. I got that you understood it. Which other 4 would you like me to read.

5/5!!!!

Vanessa ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-27

Beautifully written, heartfelt, and absoulty amazing. THe flow is flawless, and the word choice excellent. The vocab you used really brought out the emtion strongly. well done 5/5

Lance Hardy ( F P C ) at 2007-05-28

Very nice

Spammy at 2007-05-28

Wow this poem is amazing. 5/5 keep up the great work :)

For My Dying Rose ( F P C ) at 2007-05-28

Omg, that was a really great poem. and well
written too. great job.

Teria ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-29

Great poem, hun.
Made me cry, lol. I've recently went through this, so it's easy to relate to. Great way to put it in words.
Keep it up.

Live WeLL ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-30

Once again a very amazing poem.. even the title is really interesting and really pulls readers in.. well at least it did for me.. excellent job once again..i love how this poem is so sad but so sweet at the same time.. very very nicely written.. keeeep it up =]

dawn green ( F C ) at 2007-05-30

Very well written!!! bravo
God bless

Gasttlee ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-30

You have quite an interesting flow here! 5/5

M1K4 ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-31

This is a cute but sad poem, i like the way it flows and the ryhmes are well thought out, great job...5/5 * Sorry it took so long to comment on your poems...*

Kahnefan ( F C D ) at 2007-05-31

That was great!!! keep it up

J a n e ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-03

If this poem is written from your personal experience, you are a terrible person. You don't love someone "truly" AND give up on trying to hold up an essentially healthy relationship. How pathetic. Ok, now that I'm done being pissed...

X to the f'in O.

-5/5 (Joking!)


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