Albogurl
at 2007-06-10
Nice poem 5/5
Miss Elizabeth
at 2007-06-10
I like this one tom darling
Patrick Murphy ( F P C D )
at 2008-04-27
Its a good poem. Not really much wrong with it so ill give you a 5/5.
But how about you try to experiment with your poem??
Maybe you can use this as the middle of a poem and add a more descriptive begging with a slow to fast rhythem. Then as the rhythem picks up BAM this part of the poem comes in. Then as you got your reader grabbed you can slow the tempo down again and hit them with a brutal let meaningful ending. While you aim to just simply have a FINISHED piece.
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