Comments - Step into the emptiness

DarkSpirit ( F C D ) at 2007-07-04

Beautiful piece. Such image and wording are incredible. You are my second favorite writer on the site. I love your work so much and this poem is extraordinary good.

Mo ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-04

Oh my gosh - I absolutely LOVED this one. Definitely fantastic writing!! I loved the colours and the feelings of rainbows and thinsg beautiful. It was a very nice feeling to read it. Well done!!!

Mo

forever in love ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-04

Realy good job

the very first stanza
Let me drink life
from the palms of your hands
Borrow me your wings
made of dreams
just for a while,
to feel alive...

this shows the beauty of your poem. such a great work in this stanza.

but i think i loved these lines alot

Just let me slide
on the rainbows in your eyes,

. you have showed great feelings of love, it shows that you know what is the love meaning. i am happy to read your this poem.
you should keep it up this work.
and one last thing that tha words you have used in your poems were excelllent matched with you feelings. very aggressive.

and you know your these words force me to give you 5/5
take care friend

Sweet lig ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-04

I admire ur imagination..it really has a great combination of emotion and action as well... i love to read again and again.. very stunning just keep on writing... 5/5

On Cupids Bad Side ( F C ) at 2007-07-04

Beautiful piece once again. Great flow and good vocab. 5/5 from me =)

BrokenREALiTy ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-04

And to drown in that colors
`it's either :
"and to drown in those colors"
or "and to drown in that color"

Just let me slide
on the rainbows in your eyes,
`My favourite lines ! That shows an adorable elegance / beauty .

You have a vast imagination . It's beautiful when put together with your choice of words, and emotion . Just a pretty piece .
..__MiNDYY

Stephanie Naylor ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-04

All i can say is WOW, that is such a great heartfelt poem. There was so much detail it had such imagination and your word choice was flawless, this is a very great peice of work, keep it up, 5/5

Marian ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-04

Borrow me your wings
`I think 'borrow' should be 'Lend'?

This was truly a fantastic love poem. The mental images you conjured within your words brought into play a rather surreal and magical world. It's beautifully full of hope and love. And, like I've said, it's fantastic. Nicely done, nonetheless. 5/5 ~Marian

xkelsiex ( F C ) at 2007-07-05

Another excellent poem.I liked it alot.

Sweet Fragility ( F C D ) at 2007-07-05

Imagery, great. Again, wonderful word choice. Lots of effort into this piece. Keep it up. 5/5

Don't hold back
in front of the abyss
let's step into the emptiness
and learn how to fly.

My fave lines ^^

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-06

Like I said, I envy your poetic skill This poem has an amazing free verse flow with a depth that is just out of this world

Grey Ajurahck ( P ) at 2007-07-06

This is so wonderfully written. The wording, phrasing really paint a picture. This poem says so much. You are very talented.

Peace,

Grey Ajurahck

Solus ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-07

So pretty....but love is not always enough.

Solus ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-07

So pretty....but love is not always enough.

Hebe ( F P C ) at 2007-07-11

Great poem.
Love the words you used.

" Just let me slide
on the rainbows in your eyes "

My favourite lines.
Wonderful piece of writing.
Take care

Lost & Delirious ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-11

Wow, I really liked your poem. You have a special way of writing, it's not a common one. I think this poem is really different from all the ones I've read before, and I really liked that. It's not boring at all.

My favorite part is:

Don't hold back
in front of the abyss
let's step into the emptiness
and learn how to fly.

I think repeating that stanza was perfect. The first stanza is also a favorite. I just didn't know which one to choose. LOL.

This love poem is great, I loved the originality in it.

Great job!

Keep writing.


XoXo
Gaby

JaMeS ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-21

Excellent writing it was a beautiful poem well done :) top marks!!

kristen ( F P D ) at 2007-07-22

I LOVE this poem....its so beautifully written and deep. 5/5

SlaveToTheMusic ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-25

I honestly don't know how you write poems that have a flow but don't rhyme I have only seen very few who can do this really well and it amazes me. Again the emotion so deep. I truely have loved every piece of yours I have read here. Well done you deserve a 5/5~mel

DaRk AnG3l RoS3 ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-31

Another 5/5, i loved the opening paragraph. wikid :)

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