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Tricky Daze ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-11

I saw that it's your first love poem...and it shouldn't be the last one..Because it's full of emotion and I liked your word usage

My fave lines;

In name only shall we say two words--
But let there be no bitterness,

Pretty good

Keep it up,
Laura

Brittney ( F C D ) at 2007-08-11

'Have all but love; have none but love,
Drink to silence or drink to me.
I am your virtues; your weakened dreams,
Once upon the Greenland Seas.'
^My favorite lines.
This poem is full of such grand emotion. Completely brilliant. This is a wonderful love poem. Can't wait to read more!
5/5
*Brittney

Karl Wild AKA GodsGift ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-11

I thought the poem was very heartfelt and written well, the imagery and vocab were great as well. I loved how it was a love poem but rather unique from most others. Keep up the great work 5/5 GG23

Marian ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-11

What a terrific success. It's too marvelous for meager words to offer merit, I believe. This piece further rings a bell with me. It actually reminds me of Robert Browning's poem: My Last Duchess. Not only does it seem an allusion to the said poem, but it also works as a good comeback for the Duke's new wife's point of view. But then, again... perhaps it's just me.
I truly enjoyed this piece. All the best.

InvisiblyBroken15 ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-11

Such a heartfelt poem...and i see its your first love poem...you did a great job on it..

"Have all but love; have none but love,
Drink to silence or drink to me.
I am your virtues; your weakened dreams,
Once upon the Greenland Seas."

^^ these are my favorite lines..i dont know why but i just love them..they really caught my attention...good job.5/5

Adele ( F C D ) at 2007-08-13

I like this poem if flows well although i'm not sure about some of the wording I gave this one 4/5.

Cella Bella ( F C D ) at 2007-08-13

4th line from the bottom, "you're see", maybe you'll see. Anyway, this was a wonderful and unique piece. You're very talented hun. I look forward to reading more. 5/5

marcella

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