Marc Ortiz ( F P C D )
at 2007-08-13
This is really sweet.. I think the flow was okay, keep up the good work.
I really adore this two lines.
My love for you will never fade
How as long as my heart beats strong & true
Lauriel Chambers
at 2007-08-13
"my stomach falls to my feet". I love that line. And I love that feeling...that little rush you get when the one you love comes near you. You described it well in that line and in the whole poem. Liked it a lot!
BabblingxoBrooke ( F P C )
at 2007-08-16
This poem is so cute, i love the flow and the wording, i just love the whole thing!=]
Tricky Daze ( F P C D )
at 2007-08-17
It was so adroing and touching..Your word usage was so suitable
just a spell mistake:forver=forever
Keep it up,
Laura
Tricky Daze ( F P C D )
at 2007-08-17
It was so adroing and touching..Your word usage was so suitable
just a spell mistake:forver=forever
Keep it up,
Laura
abstrusity ( F C D )
at 2009-05-15
Aw, what an emotional and heartwarming poem. great job, I loved it. :)
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