Comments - Diamond In The Sand

Reminders Torture ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-31

Oh this was great.Each stanza was well written.Oh and I love the title.Good choice of words.
Take care

Twisted Heart ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-31

Gem,

This was great. Loved the word and choices in your phrasing. And As it has been said before, that's how love hits sometimes. It just pops up out of nowhere and knocks you over.

You are trully one of the lucky ones who finds it and holds tight to the reigns.

Wonderful Job

Always,
Jeannie

Jessie at 2007-08-31

I like ur poem alot your a good writer

Gasttlee ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-31

"Finding love in this lonely world
Was like finding a needle in a haystack"

This really touched me the most because it is so deep and so true! 5/5

NyellMoonlight ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-31

Beautifully written love poem, with great imagery and good choice of words. You expressed emotions in it excellently. The ending is very captivating and effective (the last stanza)
My favorite stanza is:

-Something that just wasn't worth the effort
The countless disappointments
The tears...
The hurt...
Weighing down the fragile heart
When something that felt like love
Turned out to be a sham
A red herring-

Well done, 5/5 from me

Monica at 2007-08-31

I'm glad you dound your little diamond!!


very adorable poem! XD it made me grin.

HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-31

Awehh..I loved this ! The poem was full of imagery, especially the first stanza..and it really was written well. Love is very hard to find, and you have written out that journey well lol, glad you got him !

5.5
:]

♥shyann♥ ( F P C ) at 2007-08-31

Wow im not one for poems that don't rhyme....but you exspressed this so beautifully and i love the message you gave out...by the end of the poem i got goosebumps and not a lot of poems do that for me....well this one is definetly going to my favourites...keep up the great work your doing great 5/5:)

Deana ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-01

I love the sincerety that radiates from this poem,a real tribute to that special person in your life, this must make him very happy, great write Gem.

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-01

Gem
Beautiful piece. Your love shines through your words in this write.

But even pipe dreams can become a reality
Love can find you when you least expect it
When you cease looking
It springs out of nowhere
Like a long lost friend
A best friend
A lover

You know I am a believer in true love and I know like me you have found that :)
Excellent!
Love Cindy

Lenny ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-01

Thats gorgeous :)
great poem

Shaun ( F C ) at 2007-09-01

That was soooo well written. Great poem, keep up the good work :) Just beautifully written. I like it...

moonlil ( F P C ) at 2007-09-01

Wow, that's an absolutely amazing and beautiful poem! I love it. It's so true.. Good job! Take care and keep on writing.

*Charisma* ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-02

Amazing Gem! So glad for you to write again. This piece was different than your others, but amazing with it's metaphors and comparisons...good flow to it too. Sometimes with free verse, I too, find it hard on how to break up the words into stanzas, but you did it beautifully! Great job!
I LOVED this line
Nailing jelly to a tree

How amazing in imagery that was. Plus, it was original and sort of funny and sweet! Just perfect!
Charisma*

elmo loves you at 2007-09-02

Two thumbs up amazing

Marc Ortiz ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-02

As always your poems are amazing! :) That guy must be really lucky to have you :) I really love the 1st two lines in this poem.. I think it really grabs the reader's attention :)
What I also love in this poem is the title :) it really is beautiful..

5/5 as always.
Please keep writing!
Thanks for the comment :)

withlove ( F P C ) at 2007-09-04

Love it! very well written and i agree with all that was said

Kaylee ( P ) at 2007-09-05

I loved this poem...its kinda like the one i wrote "love is real"...check it out please...but yea i loved this poem (especially the parts "Nailing jelly to a tree" and "When you cease looking
It springs out of nowhere
Like a long lost friend" because i love it when that happens). you always have great poems...kepp them coming

Avellana ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-05

I was smitten with 'nailing jelly to a tree'

*smiles* :)

Kirsten Fromer at 2007-09-06

I know exactly how you feel...I foun my needle in the haystack to!! He's amazing and we're soooo in love!! Well done! Please comment on one of my poems to!

Kirsten


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