Colourful Mind ( F C D )
at 2008-01-04
What a powerful poem!!! I got a tear in my eye!!! 5/5
jojo88 ( F P C )
at 2008-02-24
Thats so sweet and sad and thanks for the comnts & vots on my pomes
5/5
Omgitsbreee ( F )
at 2008-04-12
Awwwww
that is so sad :[
but it is very cuteeee <3
Meghan ( F C D )
at 2008-06-06
Wow girl that was really great! The emotions and the feeling was great. the rhyming was wonderful too. Keep it up.
5/5
Tia xOxO hi ( F P C D )
at 2008-06-07
Nice poem! the last stanza was shweet ^_^
BreakeR ( F )
at 2008-06-09
Wow thats was deep i loved it realy , feeling can kill the dreams and break the days . keep it up 5/5
Aish ( F P C D )
at 2008-08-28
This is absolutely tragic!!!!!
Second line: is that supposed to be "love" not "loe"
uhm, the flow was really good but im not sure that there was a specific rhyming pattern throughout-but thats cool.
Loved the inclusion of the note, that last stanza would have to be my fav.
Rly good!!!
4.5/5
soso ( F C D )
at 2008-09-04
Ohh,,Alisha you broke my heart with this one,,,though I believe no man deserves but really that was a heart touching poem.
take care.
Healing Spirit ( F P C D )
at 2008-09-24
I see a girl on his lap
he says things he never said to me
^^ These words touched me so deep. The pain you feel when the one you love, loves another person more than you. It can cut like a knife:(
Good poem, you really worded your emotions well!
hugs,
5/5 Ingrid
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