Barry ( F C )
at 2007-11-07
Absolutely fantastic, wonderful, one of you best poems.......especially the last stanza
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-07
Debbie
I love the way this flows and the word choices you used. It is such a beautiful and touching piece.
It would be so simple
To lay thee down beside
Or cleave unto the deep
While patient solace waits
To soothe thy troubled sleep
This stanza really spoke to me.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy
[ Praised by : debbylyn ]
End Of Eternity ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-07
This is beautiful. Your words have always struck me so hard....i love your selection of words as they simply add the spice.
its so nice to be back on site....beautiful poem dear
all the best and take care
NyellMoonlight ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-08
Ohhhh... beautiful, breathtakingly beautiful from the beginning to the end. This is one of the best love poems I've read in a while... I love every stanza, you created such captivating and enchanting atmosphere and imagery. Whole piece is very original too, filled with flawlessly described emotions.
Keep up the great work!
[ Praised by : Cindy ]
Steven Beesley ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-08
Bravo! You have done wonders using the form whilst keeping the flow tight and the imagery just right from begining to end.
Healing Spirit tpfka Broker ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-08
Very deep, touching and moving piece. You did a great job on the format, Debbie!
Take care,
5/5 Ingrid
Pete ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-09
Wonderful, wonderful imagery used here. Right from the start you set the atmosphere for the reader.
Now I've never come across this sytle before, which means one of two things .. either I haven't been looking very hard.. or
This poem is beautifully unique. Either way it's an absolute treat to read.
Really nice work.
~Pete.
[ Praised by : Sher ]
ddavidd ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-10
That would be so simple
to read you poem and enjoy
while to ignore its paths
to higher grades of the meanings
xPinkDizzyTeacupx ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-10
Ohhh how I love this.
I once attempted this style and failed miserably, but you manage to make it look so effortless and easy here.
The flow in this piece is just incredible..absolutely flawless. The words just rolled right of my tounge.
The imagery is beautifully done, it created such vivid and striking pictures that it was like I could -see- everything that was happening.
I adore the ending stanza, so powerful and intense, and it wraps the piece up so perfectly.
Just...beautiful!
[ Praised by : debbylyn ]
Makaveli ( F C D )
at 2007-11-11
After I read your poem, because I had never heard of a Monchielle I decided to write my own. So thanks for bringing this poetry style to my attention. This looks like it was written effortlessly and your word choice is superb. If only my poem had turned out to be anywhere near as great as yours.
Take Care.
Polaroid ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-12
Wow this was really great, keep it up,
i've read a couple of your poems now, and they are fantastical, so i was wondering if you could comment and vote on sum of my poems, it would be greatly appreciated.
I'm new to writing poetry so i need some feedback, thanks,
Polaroid
p.s GREAT JOB
meandhim080307 ( F C D )
at 2007-11-13
This poem was wonderfully amazing and beautiful. i loved reading it, it kept me hooked to the very last word. it is an amazing piece, i cant wait to read more from you. 5*5
Kimberly
Ashley Paul ( P C D )
at 2007-11-14
I love this poem! nice imagery, format, and subject. 5/5
Rachel ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-17
This poem is a metaphorical masterpiece. Many different interpretations could arise from this one. The flow, imagery, structure of the form and word choice are all flawless. Excellent work!
billy rob ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-22
How someone can write so beautifully and flowlessly in such a structured style amazes me. Well done, my friend. Well done, indeed. Billy Rob
Starhiker
at 2009-01-13
Beautiful Monchielle, Debbylyn! You've written a beautiful love poem here. I created this form, and you have mastered it perfectly... Please come over to AllPoetry.com and check out my Monchielles (and other poems). Link is in my profile.
Sincerely
Jim T. Henriksen
( form creator :)
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