Comments - Rear View Mirror Of What Shouldn't Be

xPinkDizzyTeacupx ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-14

"Hold onto my heart don't let it slip through fingers,
For all I have given you will be swept out to sea,"

^^ HOLY CRAP, how I love that, words couldn't possibly express how much I love those lines. Those were just BEAUTIFUL.

The rest of the poem is as well, of course, but those are just amazing, hahaha.

"For I don't want to see us as the shadowed past."

^^ I found that line alone to hold so much emotion and depth that it was overwhelming, I thought it conveyed both hope and sadness and for me that made a very powerful effect on the overall piece.

I frikken adore this poem, this is just so pretty.

Smurfie sure is on fire with this piece!

Bryan ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-14

Tis a very good poem as always mel, and i think the title tis perfect, love the grammer, i give it a flawless 5/5!!! keep them coming babe!!!

AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D ) at 2007-11-15

The imagery here just blew me away.

The second stanza was just amazing in every way. The story you told was flawlessly beautiful and the emotions you described were perfect. The feeling you created in my when I read this poem, was just amazing and overall it made me smile. By far it has to be my fave poem by you. Well done, a beautiful love poem. *5/5* for sure.

mOnStRiiToS pRiiNcEsS ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-15

Very beautiful poem. I felt all the love that came out of this. You definately expressed this feeling really well. Great poem. 5/5

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LookAtThatDorkkk ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-17

Oh my dear...
I swear I'm about to fall over in my seat, that was.. magnificent! The words you have chosen to portray your emotions were just beautiful. Every bit of this poem was beautiful. :P The flow was flawless and the imagery just blew me away.

"Our heart strings played together a melody of warmth,
Travel to your lips as your sing our words of romance,"
^^ Those lines were just... wow. :]] Amazing job, m'dear. Overall: 5.5


-- Stephanie Lynn .+.

FridusBlueheaven ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-17

Wow this is just two stanzas but it's a powerful poem. You put an emotion and you made it into a great story. Very excellently written. And the first stanza is more powerful than the last one. This must be 5/5!!!

Romantic Lover ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-18

"Hold onto my heart don't let it slip through fingers,
For all I have given you will be swept out to sea,"

Those were my favorite lines. You've expressed so much emotion in so few lines.
This was absolutely amazing.
Excellent.

NyellMoonlight ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-19

Wow... this is enchantingly beautiful, it captivate all senses through brilliant and vivid imagery that you created and fantastic atmosphere. I love your poems, they always touch me in so many ways and this one is not an exception. The second stanza is my favorite one, it is filled with excellently expressed emotions that simply portray amazing images and feelings inside of me.
Excellently done!
5/5

UnstableConcoction ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-21

Fantastic! I loved it! nice

Israfel ( F ) at 2007-11-21

Wonderful 5/5

JYOTI RANA ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-22

Excellent. Great work you have done. Beautiful discription, I enjoy to read it.