Britt ( F C D )
at 2007-11-16
OH! This is beautiful, loving, sensual and just..damn.
One thing "Rosebud shaped lips steal a rose's ruby color,"
The use of rose threw the flow off for me. What about a different color..Rosebud shaped lips steal the ruby red color ?
Just a suggestion. And the length, but I know you ran out of ideas, lmao. Either way, this is just beautiful.
Patience ( F C D )
at 2007-11-16
This is such a beautiful write. The colors painted a bright and vivid picture. Great job.
4 track demo ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-17
This is such a beautifully stunning piece that nearly brought me to tears, and i've never said that it in a comment before, i was completely captivated by your word usage, romance escalates throughout, and it's one of the finest love poems ive read in a long time, the length to me was perfect, i wish the love portrayed in this piece belonged to me..
john
Onyx Vampyre ( F C D )
at 2007-11-17
I LOVED it, but two things
1 Some of the words were a bit long and threw me off a bit (Im not good w/ long words)
2 Something about the rhythm dodn't seem quit right, IDK what it was but it was there, it the first half.
The length was perfect for me. I prefer shorter poems.
5/5
~onyx~
AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D )
at 2007-11-17
What flawless imagery!
Each word was so beautiful and while reading it, I read it slow, to savor each emotion. Your language was breath taking the poem as a whole really captured my interest.
"Souls paralyzed by infatuation"
^a beautiful line filled with reality yet dreamy.
Well done *5/5*
the unloved and unwanted ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-17
Wow, that was amazing. It brought tears to my eyes and i dont know why.6/5
SlaveToTheMusic ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-17
This was beautiful, I loved the imagery you created into my mind. So elegant, gorgeous, and enchanting. The flow was lovely and the word choice perfect. Each line held so much which was written in great depth. A romantic poem to me, really pretty, and capturing. Well done. I loved reading this enjoyable read. Keep up the great work. ~Mel
FridusBlueheaven ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-17
I love this one, I usually don't like poems with few stanzas. But I can relate this one and this is simply amazing and brilliantly written!!!
FridusBlueheaven ( F P C D )
at 2007-11-17
And also you deserve 5/5 for this one!!!
Marci
at 2007-11-18
Ok you wanted the truth so here it is....This poem is Awesome! Yes, its small, but thats the best kind if you ask me. and I agree with the change..(rose to ruby) I love it! 5/5.
ihrtschlepper ( C D )
at 2007-11-19
This is a beautiful poem with lots of emotion. well written and great imagery.
i didnt see any errors... i must be the only one that has trouble typing. lol
5/5
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