Healing Spirit tpfka Broker ( F P C D )
at 2007-12-16
You truly are a very gifted writer, Alfred.
I love the poem, it's beyond beautiful.
hugs,
Ingrid
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2007-12-16
Illum
Your poetry just blows me away to another time. Breathtaking. Always i'm either smiling or crying when I'm done.
but I am
wide-awake,
writing!
Oh, I am not sleeping!
Just laced within this
burning
love
...and
as I am quietly
watching you
it is falling
just keep on falling
upon me,
oh, the Silver Rain...
What beautiful lines. The imagery in this piece is awesome. your words are like notes being played on the readers heart. I could read your poems over and over again.
~Bravo~
~hugs~ my dear friend
Cindy
debbylyn ( F P C D )
at 2007-12-16
Oh My Illum you've done it again! Captured so much romance and beauty within your beautiful lines....
I love the refrain! :
"...and
as I am quietly
watching you
it is falling
just keep on falling
upon me,
oh, the Silver Rain... "
^has a haunting sad feel.....beautiful!
I love the dreamlike setting and the connotations of eternity....
"Time disappears with joy
to gift Us
with the teardrops of Eternity "
^what we all seek....eternal love with that special soulmate!....I love the linking of the weeping sky...the "teardrops of Eternity" and the "Silver rain" of the refrain!
"but I am
wide-awake,
writing!
Oh, I am not sleeping!
Just laced within this
burning
love"
^ beautiful insertion of the poet's soul....
You know I soooo love your love poems! BRAVO!!!!!! ~Clapping~
Take care, Debbie
NyellMoonlight ( F P C D )
at 2007-12-22
Beautifully written love poem, truly amazing. It is breathtaking, filled with excellently expressed emotions from the beginning to the end. I like the repetitions, they are truly effective. Very vivid and descriptive poems, waved with superb imagery in every stanza. The flow of the whole piece is flawless and rhythm truly beautiful and serene.
I can't chose my favorite part, every stanza is equally amazing.
Keep up!
5/5 from me
Void ( F P C D )
at 2008-01-03
I'm so glad to see you haven't changed your old style. I visited a few other writers today, and it seems that they're straying away from their own loyalty. It's funny, I've grown into such a bitter person with this love thing- and yet I still find myself writing the same ol' stuff. I think that's why it's always so refreshing to come see what you have to offer. I still think Love is your most steardy ladder, through everything you write.
I thought maybe I had gotten good enough now that I could start nitpicking at your writing; but still I'm left with no complaints. Simply just happy that your verses are still there, and still strong enough to stand alone.
Though I do wonder, why is there an 'x' on Illuminati now??? :P
Void ( F P C D )
at 2008-01-03
I'm so glad to see you haven't changed your old style. I visited a few other writers today, and it seems that they're straying away from their own loyalty. It's funny, I've grown into such a bitter person with this love thing- and yet I still find myself writing the same ol' stuff. I think that's why it's always so refreshing to come see what you have to offer. I still think Love is your most steardy ladder, through everything you write.
I thought maybe I had gotten good enough now that I could start nitpicking at your writing; but still I'm left with no complaints. Simply just happy that your verses are still there, and still strong enough to stand alone.
Though I do wonder, why is there an 'x' on Illuminati now??? :P
XMy Toxic WorldX ( F P C D )
at 2008-02-25
With petals of the starlight ???? wtf
that is really deeply romantisied.....
W0W...nice one
(0_0)>
Kelsie ( P C D )
at 2008-07-10
Wow.
this is simply beautiful.
you are an amazing writer and i LOVE this piece.
amazing job
5/5
Italian Stallion ( F P C D )
at 2009-02-08
Wow, just wow. This piece was fantastic, I loved the imagery as well as the flow in this poem. Emotion filled write from the heart, your choice of words were excellently chosen. The structure was good as well. Overall a great write from a great poet. Keep up the amazing work.
Peace, Joe
Mer Divinity ( F C D )
at 2009-04-18
Gosh, Alfred, that was so touching! I am adding this to my favorites!
<the dashing tides of your heartbeats
as they splashes>
^^ Do you mean "splash" instead of "splashes" or am I reading this wrong?
I loved the repitition of the second stanza as the 4th and 7th one, too. :)
Truly amazing, Alfred. Truly amazing.
5/5
Bri~
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