Elapsed ( F P C D )
at 2008-01-14
Wow!!.. this piece has left me utterly speechless.. The pure depth of emotion and feeling i felt from reading this poem was so inspiring!! I must say I for one am absolutely spellbound by the level of your work.. Simply fantastic!!!
Healing Spirit tpfka Broker ( F P C D )
at 2008-01-14
It's beautiful sweetheart, absolutely beautiful!
I loved every word of it...
hugs,
5/5 Ingrid
David ( F P C D )
at 2008-01-14
Find some more of the songs because your poem that you found inspiration from the music was absolutely stunning, uncanny in fact. truly well done
5/5 david
Gesselle Valle ( F C D )
at 2008-01-14
Pearls of Forever,
destined within my heart,
holding me as a lonesome prisoner
forever loveless....
wow...truly amazing poem, I must say it! Hello my dear friend. I know it has been a while, but I was sitting in my room and some how I remembered the poem you wrote to me, and so I decided to read some of your poetry! And guess what? I found this amazing poem! Keep writing my friend, you are great!
~gesselle
gIrL ( F P C )
at 2008-01-18
WOW!!!
I dont even know where my favorite part is
truely amazing
5/5 :)
Neil Marsden ( P C )
at 2008-01-20
A superb and very well crafted piece of work.
You are right in the assumption that it benefits from being read whilst listening to the specific piece of music. Brilliant!
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2008-02-02
Illum
How wonderful to be reading this right now... Again to get lost in your words of love. How I have missed your verses.
Pearls of Forever,
destined within my heart,
holding me as a lonesome prisoner
forever loveless with the
Pearls of Forever
as I drift along the River Brink
thinking of your love
the moments of Heavenly bliss
but where is my Reason to live for...?
Pearls of Forever
as I drift along the River Brink
thinking of your love
the moments of Heavenly bliss
but where is my Reason to live for...?
Pearls of Forever
Forever
Forever. That which some wish to be.
Love Cindy
~Bravo~
Cindy ( F P C D )
at 2008-02-02
Illum
I listened to the music with the poem. I love it :) Thank you so much for sharing this with me.
~Bravo~
Love cindy
Chase
at 2008-02-03
AUGH!!!! >.<!!!!!!!! Somethign about this peom... it made me so calm, yet slightly depressed... ^^;;; AMAZING WORK!!! You pour out a lot of emotion into your writting, very good!!! ^^
Italian Stallion ( F P C D )
at 2008-05-06
That was a great song by the way, and I loved the fact you were inspired by it. Yours is beautifully written, and has great imagery as well as deepth to it. The emotion flowed nicely through out. Great write!
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Pearls of Forever
^^Simple words, yet the meaning is very deep. This in it self made me want to continue reading this piece.
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How can you ask
the waves to break away
from the embrace of the Crimson Ocean,
to stop the Soul-Tears shining in these eyes
as my lips chant your name, Amarantine?
Lay your head upon my Love-filled poesy, and listen...
You, and only You
who can bless the Life around me
with your Gilded Charms
Oh my, Sweet Beloved,
till Eternity
I will long for your Zephyrs...
^^Very nice stanza, the flow was good and your choice of words was well thought out. However, I felt this stanza was a bit long and could of been chopped into two stanzas.
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Pearls of Forever
destined within my heart,
holding me as a lonesome prisoner
to watch the fadeless glair of my
Pearls of Forever,
as they laid upon the path
that I am taking loveless
but without Fortune's vigor brace
is there a Reason to live for?
^^I liked the repetition of the first line, it makes that line really stick in your head, which I like to see in writing.
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How could a Rose bloom
and glow in red hues
without the dyes of your love?
Oh, Absent only
sharpens the thorns, the thorns,
and they cut me deeply, into my soul
as I am clinching it within
and I weep, and I weep, I weep.
^^Oh I love people asking questions, it really makes the reader sit down and ponder about the outcome or how something works or is done.
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Pearls of Forever,
destined within my heart,
holding me as a lonesome prisoner
forever loveless with the
Pearls of Forever
as I drift along the River Brink
thinking of your love
the moments of Heavenly bliss
but where is my Reason to live for...?
Pearls of Forever
as I drift along the River Brink
thinking of your love
the moments of Heavenly bliss
but where is my Reason to live for...?
Pearls of Forever
Forever
^^I loved the last verse in this, it really ended the song nicely. Great write with heartfelt feelings within.
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Excellent write, keep up the great work.
Peace, Joe
[ Praised by : janis krumins ]
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