Comments - On the edge of heaven

Luanne ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Just to have you with me
I would have done almost anything
Only a blind man could have failed
to notice the state that I was in.
^^^
The things we will do to hold on to the love and to have the one we love close to us ... hoping and praying that they will return the feeling.

Every time we met,
my heart would skip a beat
Never imagined our relationship
would end in tears and defeat.
^^^
We never do imagine that it will end... and the pain that comes along with it destroys us.

My other half is what you are to me
to know all this but still having to walk away
Is more than I can bare, because in your arms
is where I belong and where I want to stay.
^^^
This stanza is painted with tears Ingrid.
To walk away knowing that this person is all you've ever wanted ... and still all you want is heart breaking to walk away from.

On the edge of heaven
but forever on the outside looking in
I will turn away from love now,
this game at which I will never win.
^^^
The pain of losing the one we love makes us just want to give up on love altogether. Guard our hearts and put up that defensive wall so that no other can ever penetrate our hearts or thoughts.
I know that feeling all to well.

You have penned an amazing sad, heart touching read here my friend.
Thank you for sharing the whispers of your heart.
Luanne

[ Praised by Cindy | Approved by Italian Stallion ]

waiting 4 some1 ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-29

Aww dear, please don't feel like this. sometimes we just don't have what we want and sometimes people who we think are the best turn to be the worse, this is life so we should move on.

your poem was really beautiful i can sense your feelings inside it

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-30

Ingrid
What a very sad piece this is. your pain I can feel in every word.

But as time went by, we did not grow
closer but drifted further apart
The more I held on to you, the more
you closed the door to your heart.

The pain coming from this stanza is so sad. When we give so much of ourselves to the one we love and not to have those feelings returned is pure agony.

Great job!
Love Cindy

End Of Eternity ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-30

On the edge of heaven
but forever on the outside looking in
I will turn away from love now,
this game at which I will never win

Very sad end specially when coming from the one who doesnt know the meaning of 'giving up'. I am sure this is just a way of releasing and you will be on your feets again.

Lovely poem dear

all the best and take care

Sarah ( F C D ) at 2008-05-01

Ingrid,

The flow was marvelous!
The words rhymed so flawlessly.

Nice job!
[5.5]

P.S. the girl on the avatar isnât me, she is a well-known singer, but I do got her hair and eyes, lol.

Take care, Ingrid.

Your friend,
Sarah

Kittens Poems ( P C ) at 2008-05-01

Well Written and so very understood. Your not alone.

♥shyann♥ ( F P C ) at 2008-05-02

Beautiful poem....i felt the sad emotions coming from this...you did an amazing job 5/5:)

rachelle ( F P C ) at 2008-05-02

I really enjoyed reading this poem of yours.
great job on your choice of words
and having it flow with ease.
you made it sound in a way that everyone
could understand :)
5/5 for you my dear!

Kaytay at 2008-05-02

Wow..i loved that last stanza
you have really done an amazing job describing something that might never happen!
keep up the good work!

mizunpr3dictable at 2008-05-02

Its funny cuz i felt this way until my best friend told mii .. sometimes when we give our all still it isnt enough... cant change someone who doesnt wanna be changed ........ letting go is the hard part .. but sometime we gotta let go of the ones we love just 2 see if it was meant 2 be....

i luv ur poem and i wish u the best .....

much luv

*mizunpr3dictable*

Megan at 2008-05-03

Fantastic! I also know what that feels like... its nice to find poems that I can relate to! I love love love this poem... Great Job... and Good Luck

ashley joy ( D ) at 2008-05-04

I loved it because I could relate. This part was really great: But as time went by, we did not grow
closer but drifted further apart
The more I held on to you, the more
you closed the door to your heart.

It has happened to me too and because I know how it feels this poem touches me so much. I give my tears to you and this wonderful work of art.

Deana ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-04

Ingrid,you can feel the raw emotion in this write,it is so hard to let go of someone we love even if we know its best,You are such a sweet person,some great love will find you and treasure you forever!

applelin at 2008-05-04

Nice words and sad emotion

I will turn away from love now,
this game at which I will never win.

Ingrid,your poem bring me back to the past ...

thank you for sharing such beautiful words with us

DeadFashionista at 2008-05-04

I love this poem. i can tell you poured your soul onto it.

Miz Poetic Rymez at 2008-05-05

Wow...touching also! it kinda gives off emotion and it makes me feel that way..

nice job!

toni rossetti at 2008-05-05

Excellent, you can feel your heart and soul, love it, let go to find happyness, you will

keani lovez koa at 2008-05-06

Great job! You can really feel the passion in this. Keep writing. Great job!
keani lovez koa

Nikki at 2008-05-06

That was brilliant its just a shame it was such a sad topic.
the more you try and shut love out the more persistant it will be to come and find you. never give up.
5.

Pamela G ( F P C ) at 2008-05-29

It was my first time read your poem and now I'm hooked. very well written, deep emotion and I can related in every stanza. Excellent!


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