Comments - Wish That I Were

Molly ( F C D ) at 2007-03-22

Cute, 5/5 for me!

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-22

Debbylyn
I am so glad you posted this. It is written with such beauty and love,

Wish that I were time
To give back what has passed
To ask for all and nothing
Just to be with you at last


This stanza really touched my heart.
Love you Cindy

Romantic Lover ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-23

Oh that was so touching. A truly beautiful poem.
I loved it.

Barry ( F C ) at 2007-03-23

A love so true and my only oneâ¦like the rain, snow, moon and golden sun
I love you as this verse has to runâ¦my deep and lonely one
You are mineâ¦.like the stars that shineâ¦forever till the end of time.....

Barry...you are so beautiful

Barry ( F C ) at 2007-03-23

Debbie please ignore a?|
words from by Pablo Neruda

I love you without knowing how, or when, or from where.
I love you straightforwardly, without complexities or pride;
so I love you because I know no other way
than this: where I does not exist, nor you,
so close that your hand on my chest is my hand,
so close that your eyes close as I fall asleep.

YOU ARE SO BEAUTIFUL....

chavii ( F C D ) at 2007-03-23

This poem is so beautiful and full of sweet tender love. Amazing write really touches ones heart.

jolee at 2007-03-23

Wow, i've probably never read a more amazing poem! i LOVED it
you are a very very talented writer
dont ever stop!

Poetess Call Me Glen-Duh! ( F C D ) at 2007-03-24

Wish that I were time
To give back what has passed
To ask for all and nothing
Just to be with you at last.
___

I love that stanza, amazing ending. Debbie, this poem is just beautiful. It touched my heart deeply and i can relate to it on so many levels. Brilliant piece. Never stop writing.

` Liz
5/5

Rachel ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-24

Beautifully penned. Impeccable rhythm and rhyme. Another 100/5!

Corinne ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-25

Beautiful

Yazdan ( F P D ) at 2007-03-26

Simple but powerful poem. That is an amazing poem. Great work!

Barry ( F C ) at 2007-03-26

You are.......
so beautiful......
the poem leaves me with no words.

*Gem* ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-26

"Wish that I were time
To give back what has passed"

Thats amazing... how many times has my mind thought a variation of those words..
Well done m'dear.
This poem speaks great volumes
5/5
*gem*

ben thompson ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-27

Wow Debbie excellent job on this poem.

Wish that I were the stars
To light your darkest night
To hold your heart inside me
A beacon shining bright

I know these feelings so well.
All the best
Ben

forever in love ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-27

I have read all your poem. it is realy gr8 symbol of love. you show that how much you love to a special person. i loved your poem. that was the best poem whihc i read today. i wish someone wouldsay me these all words. which you wrote in your poem.. gr8 work 5/5 take care.

Italian Stallion ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-28

Wow Debbie, that was beautifully written, I loved it. The flow and the emotion within was outstanding, keep up the wonderful work.

Peace, Joe

David ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-28

Well i also agree this is a very beautiful poem. the structure i thought was excellent!

5/5 David

Tom K ( F ) at 2007-03-29

Thank you for writing this sweet beautiful poem, I loved it. I identify so well with the thoughts of this poem. I will have to go back and read some more of your lovely writings. thank you.
tom

moonlil ( F P C ) at 2007-03-29

Wow, i am speechless. It is so beautiful and I just love it!

Barry ( F C ) at 2007-03-30

So close that your hand on my chest is my hand,
so close that your eyes close as I fall asleep.

YOU ARE SO BEAUTIFUL....


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