Comments - The Innocence of Youth

~Afraid_Of_The_Dark~ ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-28

Great write. I love how you tied the ending in so well with the rhythm and theme of the poem. This was well written and displayed a great deal of time and effort.

<3SoSickOfTears<3 ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-28

Oh wow...this has to be anothe favourite of mine by you.
The first stanza was such a great openerand it just kept getting better and better.
I thought the rhyme scheme was enjoyable and the flow was flawless.
Excellent work, as always.

winterseve28 ( C ) at 2007-03-28

Hopefully she'll take the long way around and not follow the masses, or the stupid boy. Was there once a long time ago - peer pressure is a btch...great poem. You are so very talented :) 5/5

Edward D Zurovec ( F C D ) at 2007-03-28

Very good write Karl and thoughtful as well. True Indeed.
Peace and Blessings5/5

.K.i.T.t.Y. ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-28

The message behind the poem is fabulous. I loved it. this poem could have had a bigger impact through the rhyming and word choice, but its good.

~if only he knew~ ( F P C ) at 2007-03-29

Awww this is cute i like this i know how you feel this boyt tried the samething and you know it almost worked but i followed my heart and didnt do anything. great job 5/5

♥ leanne ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-30

Very well written poem, i wish i could write like this. The flow was great, never faultered and the message to the poem was so true for a lot of people.

So please follow your virgin heart,
Do not mistake his lies for truth,
All he's wanted from the very start,
Is your sacred innocence of youth

The ending was perfect, if only young girls out there could have someone give them this advice it would save a lot of heartache. Brilliant piece :)

Rachel ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-31

This message is so true and written well. Impressive that it is written by a male. Good job. Looking forward to reading more of your work soon!

Infected With his Deadly Love ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-02

Wonderful poem. I'm sure a lot of girls can relate to this. It flowed well.
Excellent write. 5/5

:Sarah:

Jonda Beth ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-02

Oh great...now I feel like shit...it was a great poem and so true...but I still feel like an idiot...it had a good flow and I loved the last stanza...great write..
Jonda Beth

xoxokissesxoxo ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-02

Beautiful poem. so true! i love it. i have written a few poems similar to this. i know a great song that is like this too. 5/5 beautimous...

xoxo kisses

cowgirlstar26 ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-02

Now if all my friends could take this and apply it to their lives......I wish I would have :( anyhow great write, amazing message :)

5.5

&& 0ur d3stiny ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-02

Amazing!
This has got to be my favorite poem of yours, that you have ever written. And the truly sad thing is that all of this is true. =[ The flow was flawless, the word usage was great, and the emotions were pouring out through every word. Fantastic job, keep writing! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

Daenerys Stormborn ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-02

How touching...literally. Good poem, but I can't relate. The rhymes are simple, but I do that too at times. Why use complex words when basic words can get the job done?

5/5

travisinabottle ( F D ) at 2007-04-02

Very good. I think a lot of young ladies are having trouble with this. I hope they can all get the chance to read this amazing piece. Well done.

-Travis[InABottle]

tinkerbell at 2007-04-03

Hey thnx for commenting my poem i like this poem because it explains the situation and the horrible truth of this fact so well but to realise that you have wrote something like this is great because it means your not one of those people that want to take other peoples innocence as there ares o many out there today wicked job 5/5 :)

Rhonda {xoxo} Elizabeth ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-04

I love this poem... it is amazing, and so true! love the rhyming and the flow of the poem the wording is great too

Bianca ( C ) at 2007-04-05

Like always this is a great poem.. i really liked it and it is so true some guys are just jerks but wat can we do... keep up the good work like always... i really liked it

Gasttlee ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-05

This is deep! 5/5

Face The W0rld xx ( F P C D ) at 2007-04-21

Wow.
This poem was splendid. & the sad thing is all of this is true, not one word was a lie. The emotions poured out through every word, the flow was flawless, & the vocab was wonderful. Keep writing! 5.5

Stephanie Lynn .+.


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