Comments - The Luckiest Guy

loretta Taylor ( F P C ) at 2006-07-29

You are so talented. I have added you to my list of favorites. 5/5 Loretta

Michelle Pelletier ( P ) at 2006-07-29

I really like this one and i bet someones felt that way before

Sweet MeMoRiEs at 2006-08-01


Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-02

You are doing well ...some of this reminds me of the pure love expressed by the master poet Kahlil Gibran in his book 'The Prophet ... google it

When love beckons to you follow him,

Though his ways are hard and steep.

And when his wings enfold you yield to him,

Though the sword hidden among his pinions may wound you.

And when he speaks to you believe in him,

Though his voice may shatter your dreams as the north wind lays waste the garden.

For even as love crowns you so shall he crucify you. Even as he is for your growth so is he for your pruning

Lesbian ( F C D ) at 2006-08-02

Goral! You are a talented writer,,, and i know exactly how you feel there,,, for i loved a girl who had some1 else,, and you said all my feelings there in your poem! good work :D

рортаят™ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-03

Awh, that's really sweet. I loved your wording choices, and te structure, and flow was great.

Kisses all around(AnnMarie) ( F C D ) at 2006-08-04

Great poem, there was alot of good structure and the flow was really nice!!

Thanks for your comments,

Bhavingr8 ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-05

Aahhhh... i haven't read other people's comments. i don't want to get inspired by reading the previous comments. but i know how it feels when something like this happens.... brain gets numb.... hands shiver.... tears fight to come out of eyes.... i felt the same thing when i wrote "its her wedding today" and "just for a bit of change"

5/5. this poem touched my heart!

Angel ( F C D ) at 2006-08-06

Wow... words that are so true... everyone at some point feels this way... so heartfelt... keep up the good work


♀Paper♀ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-06

I really enjoyed reading this poem
sept it shows that you still love her even tho you say
"Because the girl who I loved, is your lover."
"Even though I loved her a lot."

♀Paper♀ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-06

And sence i accidently clicked send i shall continue here...
so the Love vs. Loved thing sorta threw off the poem a little.
In stanza 5 repeating the word SAD makes it seem a little pulled apart..
maybe if you use sad in the first verse of stanze 5 and a synonym for verse 3, it will give it a more dramatic affect
other then that i think its a great poem and well writen.

lღ Ti penso sempre ღl ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-06

Awww, beautiful and sad. I love it are just so amazing. After reading this small amount of your heartfelt love poems I think you are taking a place on my favorites. I will be back to read more. Keep it up and take care.

nichole at 2006-08-08

I like it its sad sry 4 ur lost love but you'll find some1 who can tell u that they love u again just think of it it that way k

*wishing you would save me* ( F C ) at 2006-08-09

Wow that was really good i could really relate except i would be writing it about a girl being lucky lol but anyways i really liked it!

Lucy ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-09

Awww u really are fantastic at expressing your feelings!!! keep it up

xoxo Lucy

Ashley at 2006-08-11

Your a real good poet

mandieD ( D ) at 2006-08-11

How sad it is when those we love don't love us back.
been there many times. great way to express these feelings is through poetry and you did a great job with this one.

//Tragically Beautiful\ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-11

Really sweet poem. Truly original. I liked how you formatted it like a letter--totally brilliant.

mrhope at 2006-08-12

Nice poem and I feel the pain

♥ Jєѕѕу ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-12

Awww.. this was good.. it flowed pretty well, had good descriptions, and was filled with emotion.. there are a few grammer mistakes that you should fix, but other than that.. nice job! 5/5

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