Comments - To See Your Beautiful Smile

Sondos ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-06

This had a beautiful inspirational feel to it and i really loved that about it. Well written and a good rhyme scheme

lღ Ti penso sempre ღl ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-06

Aww! Very expressive and very sweet. Beautiful and simple in every way. Wonderful write. 5/5

goran ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-06

Thank you alllllllllllllllllllll.................

shobhana kumar ( F C D ) at 2006-08-07

Beautifully written Goran.

just a suggestion - did you mean the last line in the poem to read "No matter what the world will say?"

great to know we have a published poet amidst us. Will come back to check out more of yours.

good luck and peace
shobhana

Lesbian ( F C D ) at 2006-08-07

What can i say? you are a good writter, i am speachless.

5/5 keep up the good work

♥ Jєѕѕу ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-07

Awwww.. this was really sweet.. the descriptions were beautiful, it flowed well, and the rhymes worked..

That I will go thousand miles.
^ you should add in "a" before "thousand"

No matter what the world say.
^ here it should be "says" but if you want it to rhyme, why don't you add in "will" before "say"

nice job! 5/5

Mr_blueknight ( F C D ) at 2006-08-08

Ok goran this sis great and i admit that your good in short love poems , the only things that capture my attention is the fist stanza the line says
"I can fly like a bird'
um that was ok but then it would be better if you change that in such more captivating line

thats all and the rest was great i love the flow

hope it will help you

thanks

Geneross

Lucy ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-09

Awww its so sweet, i loved it!! your a great writer.. no doubts!!

xoxo Lucy

Bridgette ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-09

Aww... this is such a sweet poem. She is a very lucky girl. The flow and rhythm of this is really good and I loved all of it! Keep it up! 5/5

*Beautiful*Angel* ( F C D ) at 2006-08-09

Ah this poem is so cute! it has a pretty good flow and it's just over all very good.

† â ߣ€èÐïñg ßrøkë ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-11

Now that's passion... you have a way with words. Great job 5/5

Ashley at 2006-08-11

Wow you write so beautifully

Darien ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-11

You are one of the best love poets on this site. This was a sweet, simple poem with a lot of heartfelt emotions. Wonderful writting.

Brittney Schmelter ( F P C D ) at 2006-08-11

I usually say, my fav stanza is... but... i like them all! great job 5/5 you deserve no less.

lexie ( P C D ) at 2006-08-11

Its so sweet.i really like it:Dbeautifully written.
--lexie

shae ( C D ) at 2006-08-12

Your a fabulous writer. You are insparational. I'm not as good as you but i hope to be one day. Thanks for your comment on one of m poems. I love getting comments cause i love when i know that someone is reading m poems and someone appreciates them. Your great, keep on writing...
thanks again
love from shae!

myshiningstar14 ( F P C ) at 2006-08-12

Your styles are different..vry refreshing. keep up the great work. vry good piece.

Lissa

Claire ( D ) at 2006-08-14

This poem of yours, is beautiful! i love it. it made me smile....for a long time. lol. i look forward to reading more of your poems, your an excellent poet. and im in love with your writing. :D

Love Claire. x o x o

Maddy ( F P C ) at 2006-08-15

W0w... that is amazing, y0u hav s0 much talent!! an0ther beautiful p0em by a beautiful auth0r ;x
l0ve maddy x0ox

*~*~*Crystal Dreams*~*~* ( F C ) at 2006-08-16

To see your beautiful smile,
I will change my own way.
I will break the chain of values,
No matter what the world say.

hey yaar
thats simply beautiful 5/5

:)


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