Comments - Ivory Black

¤Kitty¤ ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-28

I lovedddd it. i think its perfect. 5/5.

e LIZ a beth ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-30

Woah man. that was amazing. i really love it. I'll then bury her heart in the ground,
And remove it's evil seeds,
So it can't grow or ever be found,
As forever, Ivory Black it bleeds.


^i love that stanza!!!!!! its amaing.


•PárKerr• ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-30

Wow.. this is wicked amazing. the end's my favorite. the rhythm's like.. song-ish. i like it. great job!

-Parker

XxFallenxFromxGracexX ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-31

Great poem!!!!!!!!! like all your others well done!!!
5/5
LuV FallenxFromxGrace

Mousie ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-01

Wow, that was amazing, blew me away! i really loved that poem, the wording, the strong feelings, the flow, it was all wonderful! beautiful job, really 5/5

michelle ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-01

Wow!!!! this poem is really great..its so deep.i love it. you have alot of talent.

Taylor ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-02

Well hey, when you find that golden heart be sure to write about it, would ya? I can't imagine how good it'll be. This ones great and its about the one you don't like so much

mistressxsork ( F C D ) at 2007-01-04

No offense.. but

mistressxsork ( F C D ) at 2007-01-04

^^ oops. anyway to finish that..

..but I made myself read this poem.. it wasn't the best. I don't like things that everyone writes about. Though I contradict myself.. ah well. Good work, I guess.. 4.3/5

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-05

Wow you really have a way with your words. excellent job! I really enjoyed this write. Take Care Cindy

Italian Stallion ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-05

Wow, yet another amazing write by a wonderful poet. The flow and strucutre were both good. And so much emotion within. Great Job!

Peace, Joe

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-05

Great structure, but the content overwelmingly overshadows it with a form I can relate to

Tripp ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-06

You sir, are a writer of amazing talent. I love the almost ironic title...Ivory Black. It fits this poem perfectly. the contrast of white and black, love and hate. very strong and intense. Luckily I've never had a love turn on me...and hopefully never will.

this told a story in the lines, and I really like it when that happens...definitely another 5/5 for you

ashley at 2007-01-06

You know maybe you should give me some tips on these poems cuz they are best by far that i have read on this site...LOVE IT!!!!...u'll find ur golden love

Rachel Barnett ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-06

This is awesome. Nice imagery and flow. 5/5

becca ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-06

Wow.. amazing poem.. there is absolutely nothing i can say to help you fix it.. its perfect the way it is.. wow.. just great job!

Bethany at 2007-01-08

It was good. sad, but good. 5/5

lexie ( P C D ) at 2007-01-08

That was amazing, you convey the emotions so well.using ivory black to describe her heart was really powerful to me. 5/5
--lexie

»тωіѕтє∂.яєαlity« ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-09

Aww this one's adorable too. I coudn't keep my eyes off of it. And it left me wanting to read more.

The flow was well done in this one, but a little rocky in areas. But we're not all perfect.

The topic and theme of this poem was so original I almost screamed in amazement of how someone could come up with something like this. It was really well thought out, and you really had inner passion that came out in this piece. Keep it up. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

♥ leanne ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-11

Absolutely brilliant!!
Your talent really shines through in your work, the flow was great, your use of vocab was great and the imagery was great too. In my opinion flawless.
Definate 5/5


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