Comments - Hand in Hand

tinna ( F C ) at 2007-01-08

I dont think u need more praise from me, but u know what i mean, its really good, i miss u so much..

»тωіѕтє∂.яєαlity« ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-09

Aww it's so cute. It gave me the metaphor of being safe in someone's hands, and no one could touch you when they were with each other. ^_^ Cute feeling lol.

The flow was really good for the most part. Just the first stanza really got me thrown off with the flow.
[Why the stars seem brighter then ever before]
Suggestion: Why the stars seem brighter than before --> It helps the flow a lot and still keeps the idea of the original write.

The rhymes and vocabulary you used were great! They really gave me a good image in my head of what was happening and how you felt about it. Great job. =) 5/5 xxoo


Tara-Kay ( F C D ) at 2007-01-09

Wow, this was awesome and reminding me of so many pleasent nights i spent with my ex. he was just amazing, so sweet and gentle and kind, i spent every moment of every day with him, he is just adorable, I miss him.
Anyways, a lovely poem, with so much love and emotion, keep writing

Contemplating_Suicide ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-10

Aww! Such a sweet sweet poem. It was really beautiful. The rhyming was amazing - my favourite part of the poem. It had a good flow, and the vocab usage was really good. The emotian is portrayed brilliantly. An excellent job! Keep it up! xx

♥ leanne ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-11

Such a sweet poem, i could actually see a picture of two people walking hand in hand and it made me smile, great flow throughout!

Amber/Loves That Guy/ ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-14

Wow, I love the descriptions! It paints a beautiful picture in my mind!

jay at 2007-01-14

Hey bro this poems is awesome. it totally painted a pic for me, is this a peson in your life?but keep up the great work bro, ill be sure to read you a lot more.

Brian Hwang at 2007-01-15

Very nice

~PuRe_IlLuSiOn~ ( C D ) at 2007-01-16

I enjoyed reading this poem a me it sounded sweet...a beautifully written poem indeed... I like the description and the imagery...keep up the good work...and hope to read more...5/5 :)

Jasmine ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-18

Thats amazing and beautiful, really good work, keep it up!

Love Reject ( P ) at 2007-01-19

Unbelievably this comes from the same mind that produces The One Eyed Beast.

Darien ( F P C D ) at 2007-01-23

Nicely done man, this definitely gives you some points for that erotic poem you wrote! ahaha, you are a talented poet my friend.

Ray at 2007-01-28

Incredible. good work with imagery, painted a great picture with only a few words

just another girl ( F C ) at 2007-02-04

It's so beautiful!

Jenni ( F C D ) at 2007-02-23

Aww. this poem was so sweet. I loved the descriptions. It was a very well written poem. You are one of the few writers that rhymes the way you do in such an eloquent way. wonderful write! 5/5

::TheFireInMyEyes:: ( F C D ) at 2007-02-27

You write the most beautiful love poems I've read on this site. I really mean that. This seems so heartfelt. 5/5


K.i.T.t.Y. ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-05

God[']s command.

again this is fabulous. i love your work. you have been favorited.

poisonmist at 2007-03-16

Nice structure and word choice. I enjoyed your poem. Keep it up.

Live WeLL ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-24

Awwww... you just have a way with words and describing love. This poem actually made me smile. It's just a great feeling altogether and the way you described it made it even better. Of course you deserve nothing less than a 5.

Nz0 ( F C D ) at 2007-07-18

Hehe definatly worth reading again =D
i luv the descriptive writing and great word use, i enjoyed every line!

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