Comments - The Edge of Eternity

shawn hoskins ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-04

All i can say is that was an awesome poem, and so true i can relate to this poem alot, your very talented going to add you to my favs

christina ( D ) at 2007-06-04

"To hear somebody say "I love you",
Could be the greatest feeling ever known,
But if those words turnout untrue,
Soon enough you'll be all alone."


this stanza i have to say was my fovorite one
to hear someone say i love you and its untrue is the most hurtful thing someone can go though i know this cuzi've had it happned welll actually i had it happend a couple of days ago when i talked to my "Father" on the phone(on mistake) he said i love you at the end of the call but i know he didn't meant it
i know he really didn't mean it cuz te thing he said before it was "i have to talk my gf" and another thing is that he hung up before i said it well 6/5 i love the emotin your a very talented write once again keep it up bye

Christina

Tara-Kay ( F C D ) at 2007-06-05

Wow, i was amazed by this, so real, so true, a really awesome piece of writing.
It is something i can relate to and somethong in time everyone will be able to understand.
you are so talented
love Tara-Kay
x

~PuRe_IlLuSiOn~ ( C D ) at 2007-06-05

Wow! This poem was amazing... And every word you put into this is true... You have talent and dont ever let it go to waste... Keep on writing... I look forward to reading more of your work... :)

MezmeRyz ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-07

Awesome! i enjoy your use of volcab and sentence structures alot! they are so perfect...and the poem has such a truthful meaning...'i love you' could mean so much when heard, but youu are alone when they are untrue...as one of the stanzas says..that was my favorite stanza! xx

xStillxThexOnlyxOne ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-07

Ah another wonderfuly and such a true poem.
Most people just over use the phrase I love you and forget the real meaning. WEll done. Thanks for the comment! God Bless 5/5
<3tay

Mousie ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-14

Another beautiful write, your words are very powerful 5/5

Tammie ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-14

I enjoyed this poem most, not because I think it was better than the rest, but because I can relate to it so much. The flow was great, and the vocab simple, yet explained everything perfectly, with the rhyming not sounding forced at all. A wonderful write.

You sure do have a lot of talent. I really enjoy reading your poetry. =]

5/5 For this, I loved it.

Tammie

xo kisses xo ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-14

U are an amasing writer. your poems are so true and seem straight from the heart. i love this one. its so true!

xo kisses xo

Kaila ( F P C D ) at 2007-06-15

Very good rhyme sceem
The flow was amazing
And the vocabulary was right on!
nice work!
5/5

livin in a lonely hell ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-03

Great emotion in the poem you are very passionate in your writing and it shows when you read
laura

Andrew Morton ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-10

"So you listen and take a chance,
Forget all about flirting with disaster,
Because love has you in a trance,
And your heart is beating faster."

its amazing the things that love can do to us..its more than just a chemical imbalance..and you portrayed that amazingly throughout this entire write...keep up the good work dude!

nikki ( F C D ) at 2007-07-10

Oh my god, that poem was awesome, i absolutely loved it, the way you describe the poem, and the picture it brings to my mind, the message you get across so well, amazing write. 5/5

Sam Mayo ( F P C D ) at 2007-07-11

Not as good as your older ones but it still hit home
4/5

HUGIYDAWY ( F C ) at 2007-07-12

Again... another poem that amazes me.
i dnt know how u do it
ur words r captivating.
when i read ur poems i cannot look away!

Molly Elizabeth ( F P C ) at 2007-07-16

This is my favorite poem of yours. So beautiful... I can really relate to this, the feelings potrayed are amazing... I like that you wrote about how great it feels to be in love, but how heartbreaking it is when it's only a lie... Great poem... i actually think i'm going to add it to my favorites!! I really love your writing!! Keep up the amazing work :-) 5/5!!

playful*plaze* ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-06

Good poem

Alissa ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-10

OH MY,
how much of a greater poet can you be?
Each poem I read of yours, it seems to be better than the last. This poem, oh dear...it has so much meaning and pure talent that it's hard to bare.
Many have attempted to write about love,
even I have...
but to me,
you are the only one that has truly
succeeded!
You are amazing, someone new
to put on my favourite authors' list!
5/5!!!

XXTruthSeekerXX ( F C D ) at 2007-08-13

The poem completely fits my life. I see so many hearts getting broken and so many fake "love" that I end up refusing to try anything with that subject. Good poem

NyellMoonlight ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-24

Really deep and interesting, I like the topic and the way you wrote it was good. It is simple and easy to understand yet very deep and powerful.
My favorite stanza is:

-So you listen and take a chance,
Forget all about flirting with disaster,
Because love has you in a trance,
And your heart is beating faster.-

Good rhymes, too, you created great flow through this piece.


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