Comments - Priceless Occasion

Viola x MyBrokenSmile x ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-02

WOW! what an incredibly insighful poem. I love this. makes us all think. you present a great view here that sadly not many of us see.
Though love may end in sorrow, if it brought you nothing but happiness while you were experiencing it, then why dread it?..
that is a great point. and i do agree with it very much.
i was especially amazed with this stanza:

Who's to say that all happiness is lost,
Just because someone hurt you deep?
Who says you have to throw away the memories,
That you were clearly meant to keep?

the part about the memories is so true. i hold my memories safe with me all the time and never hate the people who have hurt me.

the poem flowed well. the emotion behind it was deep. and it was generally well penned. a great write!
keep it up
--Viola

twisted reality ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-02

Hmmm...I think this should go into the poems about life section. It really fits in with life and how people pass and how we should be happy that they did and not hate them, and keep living every day to the fullest. But that's your choice. =)

This one was really well written. It was simple yet unique and had quite a good flow and rhythm to it. The rhyming was superbly done, most of the rhymes I have never seen rhyme together before. Very well done. I wouldn't change a thing. =) 5/5 xoo

Samantha

Marian ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-02

The theme employed by this poem is utterly captivating. It captures my heart with a loving, yet compelling insight and depth. The seeming truth brought into life rings a bell, actually. How Love changes over time is not too uncommon, I believe. Very provocative. I truly enjoyed this piece, Mindy.

BECCA lessTHANthree ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-03

Fantastic job! this poem is beautiful... these lines especially are excellent
"Why feel remorse for what was lost,
And look ahead to a broken tomorrow?"
a very enjoyable read i wanted it to go on and on... the flow was perfect and though the word choice was simple the words together were strong...


however.. i may have put this under life poems.. because overall its teaching you a better way to live a happy life

5/5

Cella Bella ( F C D ) at 2007-08-03

I loved these lines, "Who says you have to throw away the memories,
That you were clearly meant to keep?"
They were perfect for this piece. They really grabbed my attention. The entire poem was wonderful indeed. Superb write! 5/5

marcella

SecludedSerendipity ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-03

Oh, this was wonderful. It was so positive, as if creating a clear picture for those who think the end of a relationship means a bleak world ahead. I loved it. The flow was wonderful, too, as was the wording and structure. Excellent. ^_^

Rawrrr ItsStephyy ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-03

"So when you think back to the painful recollections,
Don't cry or scream because they're merely memories.
Smile gratefully for the priceless chance you got,
To live out some of life's greatest fantasies."

^ *nods head*
So true, so true.

Again, you did a spectacular job. You always have such inspirational messages in your poems && they always make me think. :P The flow was great && I loved how you asked the questions... very unique. :]

Magnificent job! Keep writing. 5.5

- Stephyy <3

nikki ( F C D ) at 2007-08-04

I was a perfectly penned poem. i absolutely loved it, the structure was awesome, the flow was perfect. and the rhyming was just amazing. 5/5

livin in a lonely hell ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-05

Omg another great one that i very much enjoyed reading
you make people aware of things that are there, the words just jumped out at me and i fell in love with it another 5/5

laura

Brittany ( P C D ) at 2007-08-05

I've also read this one before :P Seriously, I love your work. I never find your rhymes forced. You are brilliant. I think that this poem hits me deeply because I felt the same way about my ex. I wanted to hate him SO badly, but then just like the poem says...how could you? You shared so many moments and if you loved them, how could you not even want to remember that? I honestly think it's flawless.
5/5

Crystal Gaze ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-31

A very inspiring peice.
You portrayed your message quite clearly.
As other's said above, I love how you put the question's in the begining then tied them all up in the end.

You started and finished this poem, perfectly.:)
Well done,
5/5 Elly.

Kaila ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-21

Loved it!
absoltly loved it!
you did an amazing job decribing EVERYTHING!
wonderful work
5/5
kaila

AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D ) at 2007-10-21

WOW. This is for sure going into my favorites. The emotions the imagery everything about it was mind blowing. The loved the last stanza, it was an amazing way to tie the poem intogether. I do think you kinda lost the flow in the second to last stanza but the ending was so intriguing that it didn't matter. Well done *5/5*

Miranda ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-24

Very inspirational and true.Some parts,it seemed as if you wrote a sentance a certain way just to get it to rhyme,but oddly it didn't upset the flow of the poem.Great piece.A 5/5 from me.
Keep writing,
Miranda


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