Comments - The Missing Piece of my Heart

collin at 2007-08-02

Dang you must really love her i wrote my G/f something close to that and i really love how you used religion in it because i enjoy that sort of thing keep up the good work and kudos all around

Rawrrr ItsStephyy ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-02

Oh wow.
Darn you! I have tears. Lol. :]
That was so sweet, adorable, loving, etc.
I'm envious.

"We were still gazing outside the window..
The sun starts to sink in the horizon..
I whispered, "I love you, You're my only one."
Tears run down her face.. And she held her arms around me.. "

Wow. That was amazing & beautifully written - especially for 15 minutes. :] Lovely job! Keep writing. 5.5

- Stephyy <3

&& Thanks for the comments on my poems! :} It means a lot to me.

Emma ( C ) at 2007-08-06

My first kiss SUCKED....i dont regret who it was with tho cause hes my bessss friend now:)
nice job im glad your kiss was better than mind haha 5/5

Miu. ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-08

WOW! This is so amazing.Already After first sentence had lil tearys coming into eyes for the extream cuteness you have in this poem. This all is so real, can picture everything. This is very deep down from your heart, can feel emotions of these persons emotions strong. And I really hope you shared that moment with someone. It really just blows away.
Thank you for sharing with us! :)
5/5

Tricky Daze ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-11

You really write so good love poems..I gotta admit and your word usage is so suitable with the emotions of this masterpiece...I really felt love in this and it was so amazing

Keep it up,
Laura

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-13

Nice piece you have penned. Young love is the memory we still hold in our hearts as time goes on.
Good job!
Take Care Cindy

Cella Bella ( F C D ) at 2007-08-14

Now, this is a love poem. It was beautiful and heartfelt. The flow.. flawless. I really enjoyed this piece. thanks for sharing. 5/5

marcella

Catastrophic Beauty ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-14

Brilliant poem considering you wrote it in fifteen minutes. It was an adorable poem. Brought tears to my eyes. The imagery was amazing.

"I whispered, "Your eyes are the window to your heart..
"And your tears are a proof that you have one."
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Those lines are beautiful and genius.

The only bad thing about this poem is that the ending seems a bit cliche. But I give you 5/5 nevertheless.

Keep it up!

-Shannon <3

tears i cry ( F C D ) at 2007-08-14

AWWWW thats so cute and for a guy to right about
it is just sweet so cute and warm and fuzzy and it makes me think about my first kiss which was with someone i loved
your very gifted another well earnt 5/5

bon ( P ) at 2007-08-14

Wow this was amazing. Emotion pouring out from the words grasping you with each line. I just loved it. The imagery created in my mind was just oust anding due to your words. Auto 5/5..keep writing

Brittany ( F C D ) at 2007-08-15

Wow, that was really good. It's not common for me to be able to relate to a poem so much. I know exactly how you felt in that moment and exactly how you must feel now because something similar happened to me [ well the guy wasn't as sweet as you though =)) ]

I love your writing. Keep it up.

shade127 at 2007-08-15

This was very beautifully written. Somehow it seemed sad to me but filled with so much love. Excellent job Marc.

Vanessa ( F P C D ) at 2007-08-18

I am not one much for love poems, but the wording was strong, and the imagery amazing great job 5/5

Adele ( F C D ) at 2007-08-20

A sweet poem full of very strong emotion. The image created is amazing.

kitkat girl ( F C ) at 2007-08-20

This is a really cute poem!!! I am going to put it as my favorite. I love how you used the theme of two of everything.
peace
soffe

iNlOvE at 2007-08-24

This is a really nice poem!! I can feel the love you had for her. Thanx for your comment, and I'm Sorry about your break up!

Sweet Fragility ( F C D ) at 2007-09-16

Aww.. this is so sweet and 15 minutes? Really? Great job with that =)
I love the emotions and imagery in this, I love it, period!
Great job - keep it up.
5/5
I LOVED the line, "Can you feel the angels, they're watching us"

GreenxTea at 2007-09-17

That's really sweet. kisses are magical when they are with the right person...

Christina Yap ( C ) at 2007-09-17

I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I JUST LOVE IT! i flashbacked to my very first kiss from my first love, it wasnt as romantic as yours lol but for me, it meant the world, I love how uplifting this piece is. it provides hope for everyone, but instead of a missing piece of heart, i always thought of a missing rib. Since God made Eve from the rib of Adam I always used that metaphor. But we must take caution, similiar is never exact and we can be fooled. Your flow and imagery is beautiful, i give you even more credit for writing this in under 15 minutes 5/5 KEEP IT UP!

Dark Secrets ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-24

This one's awsome..
WoW 15 mins I wonder what you could come up with in an hour ... It's phenominal


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