A war between my heart and mind

by Kaila

Every time I see your eyes,
my heart skips a beat.
When you laugh at what I say,
my body fills with heat.

My hands shake when you are close,
bottled feelings want to explode,
but they tuck away and hide,
my heart struggles to crack your code.

Wanting to forget these feelings,
hoping I will not ache anymore,
they will not run nor disappear,
I cannot lock my hearts door.

One tongue-tied sentence after the next,
my mind becomes dumb, forget it all.
Rolling eyes think back to conversations,
but when you look at her I feel so small.

My heart keeps whispering, "Don't forget."
My mind says, "Hun just let him go."
Twisted into confusion when I see you,
I just can't wait for the day that you'll know.

 

Submission date : 2008-04-12

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Stuart Brown at 2008-04-13

Well done, truly a work of art.

Yumi at 2008-04-13

Wow, kinda explains wat im goin through now, it was a great poem

Livi at 2008-04-13

I know what you mean, great poem

sweet escape ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-16

This poem sounds a lot like a school girl crush, for if it were true love you would just want him happy even if your not in his future.

it was strongly writen and i could feel the conflict of your heart and soal.
5/5

SlaveToTheMusic ( F P C D ) at 2008-04-18

I liked this piece simply because I think many people can relate to this in their own way.

One tongue-tied sentence after the next,
my mind becomes dumb, forget it all.
Rolling eyes think back to conversations,
but when you look at her I feel so small.

I loved the stanza above because it was so full of emotion and really deep. One thing I did not like though was the word dumb. I feel like it through off the meaningful emotion behind it. When I read it the first thing that came to mind was no. It just didn't match or fit together at all. Still a lovely stanza.

Overall another nice love poem. ~mel



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