Letter to a Broken Heart

by RavishingEruption

Dear Heart,
I met a boy today
He smiled at me
And walked my way

He sat down
And we began to talk
The lunch bell rang
And we began to walk

We talked about music
And movies and me
He asked if I
Had Saturday free

I told him I'd think about it
And call him at 2
But first I had to go home
And write a letter to you

I know last time
It wasn't quite right
And the pain that he caused
Hurt into the night

But maybe this one's
Not gonna break you apart
So I'm just asking
Can we try again, Heart?

When he gave me his number
I felt you jump
And when he hugged be goodbye
You began to thump

If it's okay
I'll meet him tomorrow behind the tree
Think about it please
Signed,
Sincerely,

Me

 

Submission date : 2008-06-08
Last edit : 2008-06-08

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Votes : 10
Rating : 4.8

Latest comments

Finalgravedigger ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-09

WOW I love how you did the relation between you and your heart. PURE ORIGINALTY. 5/5 for sure^^

Leap Of Faith aka Temps ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-09

Excellent job. It really felt like I was reading a letter that you were addressing to your heart. Spectacular job explaining a situation in which you met a boy. :] Excellent work on your part. 5/5.

christine ( C ) at 2008-06-13

Omg! i love this.
its awesome.
great job! =]

pretty lady aka lily ( F C D ) at 2008-06-14

OMG I JUST HAVE TO SAY I LOVE IT...FIRST OF ALL THE TITLE DREW ME IN SO THAT S A BIG PLUS THE STANZAS ALL GO 2GETHER PERFECTLY SO IT HELPS IN THE FLOW OF THE STORY. BUT SERIOUSLY I FELL IN LOVE WITH UR POEM. :p