When

by Dixiedaisy

When summer sun bids goodnight
Winged creatures have ceased in flight
Stars reflected in placid lakes
No longer dance in mallards wakes

When all the oceans tides have turned
Final flames of daylight burned
Flora vanishes, lush and green
Faunas birth remains unseen

When rapids tire of rushing race
Carvings weathered from stones face
Etched for Eternity two souls together
My love for you ...sincerely, forever

 

Submission date : 2008-06-10

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GrammaConcept ( F C ) at 2008-07-15

Very nice....and truly, quite romantic...

reminds me of the lyrics a terrific vintage song:

"...In time the rockies may crumble,
Gibralter may tumble,
they're only made of clay but,
our love is here to stay..."

EmoPrincess ( F P C D ) at 2008-07-21

Wow, this is so amazing
this is one of my favourite poems, no doubt about that

Ana at 2008-07-27

Omgoshi really like this poem , its beautiful

Sylvia ( F P C D ) at 2008-09-08

A wonderful way to express love for someone.

ben thompson ( F P C D ) at 2009-02-03

Outstanding write, beautiful word usage. i positively loved it. 5/5 all the best ben thompson



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