Wish upon a star.

by Dark Savior

I wish that I could find the person to call my other.
A caring heart, who loves me like no other.
I'm unsure what to look for in a woman or where to start
They say that making love is so sensual it's considered an art

I want that love that makes me feel like I'm the one,
Never to have to worry about being out done.
I wish I knew what it is that could help me on my way,
How to kiss, make love, or even what to say.

Everywhere I look reminds me that I'm alone,
I want the family, a lover, children, and a home.
Is it too much for me to ask for all these things,
Sometimes I even get nervous when my phone rings.

Truly I don't know who would ever accept those things,
So I'll sit by this phone, in hopes that one day it rings.
Soon I'll grow old, to be left by those I love.
Sitting with god and looking down from above

Perhaps I will adopt and love them just the same,
Why must we always be playing this senile game.
I'm not sure why I want to be a father so bad,
Since I was sixteen it's a dream that I've had.

I just want to be married before my mother and father die.
It's in this way that I would be able to happily say good bye.

if someone can please explain all these thoughts,
but this is something that even with my money; can't be bought

 

Submission date : 2008-10-18
Last edit : 2008-11-02

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Finalgravedigger ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-25

I give true props to you, i usually dont like reading love poems, its the same thing over and over again, but this, this was filled with a different emotion, this had different words, true originalty, if you ever have such a fascinating love poem again plz contact me.

Mishy at 2008-10-25

Wish You Luck. [: Many People Are Thinking The Same. Give Your Best Effort.

vintage darling ( C ) at 2008-10-28

This poem was really well written.

my favourite stanza was:

Perhaps I will adopt and love them just the same,
why must we always be playing this senile game.
I'm not sure why I want to be a father so bad,
since I was sixteen it's a dream that I've had.

i especially liked the second line.
it was so descriptive and well thought out.

i can feel the yearning and desire in the poem,
good job :)

Nobodys Hero ( F C D ) at 2008-10-30

This is a really honest and emotion filled poem, your a very talented writter and i think this is one of your best poems iv'e read! The flow waskept well throughout the poem so it was easy and interesting to follow ^^

Beautiful Forever ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-31

Very beautiful poem. The flow was a little shaky, but otherwise it was brilliant. The word usage and concept were completely beautiful. Although it was enjoyable to read, the topic was a little cliche. But still, very wonderful write that deserves a 5/5



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