by Thomas
Submission date : 2012-06-23
Purple Rose ( F C D )
at 2012-06-23
I agree, this is a very cute poem Thomas. Hopefully this will come true for you someday if it hasn't already.
Excellent
5/5
Everlasting ( F P C D )
at 2012-06-24
This is a cute poem that sounded like rap.
I guess its due to the rhymes but I agree it's cute. The feeling of waiting for a text or a call from that someone and then it intensifies when in reality the text was from that someone.
5/5
Senyru ( F C D )
at 2012-06-25
In your first stanza, last verse noticed a typo; you put longs instead of lungs.
Other than that, I loved the poem it's short and sweet - and plays around a feeling that everyone has experienced ( waiting for a loved one to text first, etc).
Hannah Lizette ( F P C D )
at 2012-06-27
A very cute poem, very relatable to almost everyone. When I'm waiting for a text from someone special, I always jump with excitement. It is hard to wait for a text though, you are always on edge... I'm always very impatient. I want them to text me back, asap lol.
A fantastic write! :)
Average thoughts ( F P C D )
at 2012-06-28
I have to restrain myself
Put handcuffs on both my wrists
To stop me from texting you
But this feeling inside insists..
It happens to me evryday..
No mattr hw busy i m i cnt stp myslf frm txting her..
Grt job,thomas..
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