Experimental Lovers

by Fragile Nymph

Merely obsessive, I become
as I look deep into his lust.
his soul, his occupied mind.
Vanished becomes what I have left behind
...and gradually I become diagnosed with mania,
the consequence of his dreamy eyes
...and now what's funny is,
how he overlooks my deceitful nature
and how I might be overlooking his.

 

Submission date : 2016-06-05
Last edit : 2016-06-05

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Rating : 5.0

Latest comments

Marvellous ( F P C D ) at 2016-06-05

When it's high time, summary arrives. After sales bookkeeping follows.

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-06-08

This needs nominating!!
So good and powerful in few lines.
Em

Andrew Elliott at 2016-06-09

Excellent creativity. :)

Maple Tree ( F P C D ) at 2016-06-28

Judge Comment:

Fragile Nymph really and truly got me with this poem!

That moment within the beginning of any relationship... not knowing if things could go farther, or willing to accept this explosive yearning for another.. very powerful and descriptive poem!!