When My Grip Fails For Just A Moment.

by Naughtymouse

I don't know how to describe it,
when it pounces on me unaware,
like a blue moon,
it is a devastating tsunami of emotion,
my grip fails and I'm swept
under by the tirade of unpatrolled
feelings I thought I was in control of.....

I don't understand how it melts my steel
frame to this glutinous parody that is me.

My resolve is steadfast, always will be.

And I will love you just as the sun loves the sea at sunset;

I see myself in you and you in I,
cut from the same star, on the same path,
hand in hand through galaxies of memories
and more to be born.......

You make me both weak and strong
in the most beautiful of ways and in
the times of weakness, those times
when night seems darker than normal
and my heart weighs heavy to see yours,
once more abide with me a while until
the waters calm and again I grow
strong, for although it feels like forever
it's just a small moment in time.



N.b a snap shot of when I miss my girl

 

Submission date : 2016-09-01
Last edit : 2016-09-01

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Mr Darcy ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

Your heart feels like a surgeon slicing through nerves with a rusty scalpel.

Ben, (got it!!) Your word choice is superb, describing how desperately your heart yearns.

Your methods maybe unorthodox, but self-flaggelation is to my mind under rated.

Well done.

Michael

P.s. if you want to borrow my cat o' nine tails, just ask!!

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

What a gem!! When reading something so beautiful it gives you goose bumps like when hearing a beautiful song, just wow.

Em

Everlasting ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

No offense intended, but I was expecting to read something gore and that made me cringe? ( i don;t know which word to use) plus something that made me scream.

P.s. XD I read Mr. Darcy's comment first... and it lured me to the poem, hence, my mind was too bias as to what to expect. ( Guilty, I enjoy reading his comments when he comments XD)

As far as the poem goes, it's a beauty.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-02

Boom! This so beautiful. ..

this stanza such a tastefully sweet choice of words. ..
*****
I see myself in you and you in I,
cut from the same star, on the same path,
hand in hand through galaxies of memories
and more to be born.......


I will wait for more of your piece.
have a great time.

Gel

Sir Lancelot ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-02

And I will love you just as the sun loves the sea at sunset

^^

You come up with lines like this effortlessly, old chap. It really is rather annoying, lol

Wonderful write, Ben and great to see new stuff from you.

SL



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