If You (Diacope + Anaphora)

by Golden anGel Rhapsodist

If you will leave me hanging
I will die, die, die.

If you will supersede me with someone else
I will cry,cry,cry.

Don't you dare ask me
Why,why, why?

If you will just say
goodbye, bye, bye.




Author's note:

All of my compositions are labor of love, hurt, and pain..
Originally made from my own Experiences.
A copyright not a copycat.

Gel

 

Submission date : 2016-09-12
Last edit : 2016-10-06

Visits : 418
Votes : 3
Rating : 5.0

Latest comments

Mr Darcy ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-12

Hello Gel,

Like Ben, I enjoy repetition. Like a refrain it hammers home a point. The fact the repetition rhymes emphasis it.

Well done,

Michael

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-12

Gel,

This is a unique piece and I haven't heard of those forms before so will have to research them and give it a go. I like the rhyming and the message.
Em

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-13

Hello Sir Ben, Sir Darcy and Pretty Em,

thank you for liking my piece actually guys you 3 are my biggest influence. .

Great day to all of you.

Gel

butterfly ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-17

You are amazing!! Ben has competition

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-18

Oh no no no. . Sir Ben is one of my Idol here. . I'm also a fan.. Thank you if you see me like that. . lol

Gel



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