I Want To Hear It From You (Senryu Form)

by Golden anGel Rhapsodist

Just say one last word
I will never let you go
Try and you will see.



Gel

 

Submission date : 2016-10-10
Last edit : 2016-10-10

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Ben Pickard ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-10

Perfect, Gel. You don't often see love senryu, so this is nice to read.
All I would suggest going forward is that you try not to repeat the title in the main body of the poem simply because the form is so short and repetition should be avoided if possible. (so I have been told by much more knowledgeable people than me)

Take care and well done,

Ben

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-10

OK Sir Ben I will do that. ..Thank you... just carried away with the poem. .hahaha

Gel