And It's You All along (Senryu)

by Golden anGel Rhapsodist

My biggest mistake
Was when I said I love you
To my Universe.

*Gel*

 

Submission date : 2016-10-11
Last edit : 2016-10-12

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Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Brenda thanks for the beautiful comment...

deeplydesturbed ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-12

Well done Gel!
Excellent work! Isn't is sad when we make someone our whole universe and they make decisions which in turn have us question ourselves!

I hope it all works out and you no longer see it as a mistake, but the greatest thing you could do..

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-13

Naomi,

And your Universe is looking for another Universe. .ouch. ..
Thanks for the comment

Milly Hayward ( F C D ) at 2016-10-13

I liked this very much and it was my understanding that To my universe meant the man who you considered your universe.

So much can be read into those three simple yet emotionally complex lines. An excellent Senryu

Milly x

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-13

Thanks Milly dear. . :)



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