Insomnia (Song)

by Maher

I'm awake.
I feel my skin begin to crawl
and the million years it seems that passed
turn to morning's weary call.

I can breathe.
The heat below has traveled on
yet the daunting cries of maidens eyes
make it hard to sing this song.

Well I can read about the world,
or I could cast away these eyes of mine,
but it would never break the curse;
your apparition in my mind.

If you'd but tear away my soul
and wrench away my pride,
surely peace you'd find with dryer eyes;
maybe sleep we'll share that night.

 

Submission date : 2016-12-30
Last edit : 2016-12-30

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Maher ( F P C D ) at 2016-12-30

Lol I miss this. Travelled should have a double L, but Americans seem not to like double letters unlike the Brits and Aussies lol. It marked it red so I just used one L to shut it up.

Very interesting interpretation though and I love to see how things can be interpreted totally different by others as opposed to what was intended. It's half the fun of writing because people can show you a perspective of something that you would never have thought of - it's awesome. So thanks Em. This is why I like your breakdowns of what I write :)

Brenda ( F P C D ) at 2016-12-31

Maher, I liked this a lot. Insomnia is awful and it seems in this write that insomnia is keeping you from the woman in your dreams. She appears briefly but not nearly long enough. Well done-

Maher ( F P C D ) at 2016-12-31

Thanks Brenda, interesting way of looking at it :)

deeplydesturbed ( F P C D ) at 2016-12-31

Well done SC. Insomnia is a bit..h

Maher ( F P C D ) at 2016-12-31

Thanks USB :)



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