I will not give up

by Infected with His Deadly Love

Yes you broke my heart
But I will not break down
Yes you took my happiness
But I will not frown

Yes you killed me inside
But I wont die
Yes you don't love me
But I will not cry

Yes you tore me apart
But I'm still in one piece
yes you backed away
But my life will not cease

Yes your words hurt
But I'm moving on
Yes you caused me pain
But I've grown strong

Yes you threw me away
But I am not defeated
Yes you let me go
But I will be better treated

Yes you said goodbye
But I am not alone
Yes you didn't care
But my heart wont turn into stone

Yes you didn't tell me why
But I'll get over it
Yes you treated me bad
But I'm better than shit

Yes you took my dreams
But I wont give up hope
Yes you tortured me
But I will cope

Yes you made me sick
But I'll live through this
Yes you have gone
But I have nothing to miss

 

Submission date : 2006-07-16

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Latest comments

Therisa at 2008-03-04

The rhythm was good and it flowed together well, and it rhymed wonderfully.

YASMINE T ( F ) at 2008-06-16

Aww this is rele good poem!
keep up the good work x

NoUr ( F C D ) at 2008-08-18

Way to go gurl..really a very very nice,inspiring poem..

xxJordanxx ( F ) at 2008-09-01

Very nice poem ...
21 years old yeah???
but still young with a very good mind...!

Angel Tears ( F C ) at 2009-07-30

"Yes you killed me inside
But I wont die"

- This part in particular captured and kept my attention throughout the entire poem. I feel the same way about someone in particular.

"Yes you tore me apart
But I'm still in one piece"

- This is portrayed to perfection.

"Yes you took my dreams
But I wont give up hope
Yes you tortured me
But I will cope"

- This stanza literally brought me to tears.

"Yes you made me sick
But I'll live through this"

- Excellent line.

Overall, I love this piece. It describes things perfectly and actually gave me a bit of hope to move forward with. Please keep writing! :)



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