It was you.

by BlueDreams

It was you...'Twas always you
Who shaped my vision splendid
And took my very breath away
By beauty... never ended.

If Helena launched a thousand ships
And ruled a dynasty
Then a thousand times I've kissed your lips
And tasted ecstasy.

It was you...'Twas always you
With your love so pure...and yet
'Twas a love not meant to last
Our sun at last had set.

I lived awhile and loved awhile
In a world that gave me you
My loss shall not diminish
The love that once we knew.

 

Submission date : 2006-11-18
Last edit : 2007-04-27

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christine at 2006-11-26

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You left me speechless i'm amazed at your great use of words
to be able to put feelings in to words the way you have you have great talent....


- ×·.d0ra ( F C ) at 2006-11-26

Hey darl a touching iece very well written. good job. keep em coming xx

Rachel Barnett ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-30

Beautifully penned.

Gary Jurechka ( F P C D ) at 2007-03-01

I can't believe I hadn't commented on this before (I know I read it before). This is so well written, I like the Greek metaphor, and the rhyme scheme is flawless and flows perfectly, but it is the pure emotion of love and loss that truly touches the heart. Excellent piece!

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Gary Jurechka

NemO ( F C D ) at 2007-05-08

OmG!!!!!!!!!!!
I hvnt read your poems for so damn long!!!!!
I really missed those romantic words & those emotions & love ;)

Our sun at last had set.
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this line has a very powrful meaning =)
I totally loved your last stanza..it actually contained the whole Idea!!
V good work..I really missed you!!!

Keep it Up
G'luck
xxxxxxxxxx



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