by Sam Dent
Submission date : 2007-03-20
Last edit : 2011-04-04
tainted melody ( F P C D )
This was beautifully worded. It had wonderful fluidity. Amazing peice of writing!
Cindy Miller ( P C )
Very well spoken, I think we've all felt this, once, twice...and some still.
Great write 5/5
This poem has good use of parallel structure. It helps it have a good flow, and additionally because the rhythym of the poem is kept through the same amount of syllables per line. It gives the emotion of fear, but acceptance through love and trust.
Adreamer ( F P C D )
I was having a bad day and my friend read me this piece, not only do I love the way they read it, but I love how you wrote this too. I think the rhyming scheme was interesting and they style you chose was well penned. Great use of emotion and wonderfully written
Jay Jay aka Lil Saint ( F P C )
Thank you very much I appreciate that. I'm glad it could make you feel better. Someday when I'm upset I come back and read it as well.