Rear View Mirror Of What Shouldn't Be

by Melpomene

The present so beautiful shows the joys of our love,
Washing pain away into the depths of blazing oceans,
Hold onto my heart don't let it slip through fingers,
For all I have given you will be swept out to sea,
Becoming lost ashore within the seaweed of sadness.

Our heart strings played together a melody of warmth,
Travel to your lips as your sing our words of romance,
Grasp onto the memory's as they release from the soul
I never want to look at us through my rear view mirror,
For I don't want to see us as the shadowed past.

 

Submission date : 2007-11-14
Last edit : 2007-11-16

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Romantic Lover ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-18

"Hold onto my heart don't let it slip through fingers,
For all I have given you will be swept out to sea,"

Those were my favorite lines. You've expressed so much emotion in so few lines.
This was absolutely amazing.
Excellent.

NyellMoonlight ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-19

Wow... this is enchantingly beautiful, it captivate all senses through brilliant and vivid imagery that you created and fantastic atmosphere. I love your poems, they always touch me in so many ways and this one is not an exception. The second stanza is my favorite one, it is filled with excellently expressed emotions that simply portray amazing images and feelings inside of me.
Excellently done!
5/5

UnstableConcoction ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-21

Fantastic! I loved it! nice

Israfel ( F ) at 2007-11-21

Wonderful 5/5

JYOTI RANA ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-22

Excellent. Great work you have done. Beautiful discription, I enjoy to read it.



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