Cupid's little arrow

by Kaila

Stabbing me with intensity it digs deep into my heart,
No matter how much I tug it does not want to part,
Wedged into the bottom-less pit of my broken soul.
Digging deeper into my chest it makes itself a whole.

Puppy dog eyes stare gazing at you from afar,
Watching you walk so elegantly, wondering who you are,
Breathing deep trying to catch a smell of your scent,
Questioning if the angels in Heaven miss you yet.

This wound in my chest is building up such pain,
Sucking itself in deeper it is driving me insane,
Engulfed into my veins cutting into my soul,
Trying to figure out what exactly is its goal.

Longing puckering lips smile in your direction,
It seems as though this love is a horrible infection,
Blushing red cheeks turn brighter as you come in sight,
The urge to kiss you here and now is a feeling hard to fight.

The arrow in your heart is now connected with another,
Holding hands and kissing faces you now do love each other,
This wound is still a part of me and will not go away,
Remind me to tell Cupid, Happy Valentines Day.

 

Submission date : 2008-02-03

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InvisiblyBroken15 ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-15

Awwwww beautiful poem to read on valentines day....i love all of your poems that i've read...great work..you're very talented.5/5

LostAndConfused ( C ) at 2008-02-18

The arrow in your heart is now connected with another,
Holding hands and kissing faces you now do love each other,
This wound is still a part of me and will not go away,
Remind me to tell Cupid, Happy Valentines Day.

Loving the ending its really amazing it pulls the whole piece together, very emotional piece, great job 5/5

xxxlOvElY sWeEtHeArTxxx ( C ) at 2008-03-11

I agree love the irony in this piece 5/5

Lost and Confused ( F P C D ) at 2008-03-12

I know in comments people always hate this... but I have to say it. Aww!!! I really loved it. Its such a beautiful love poem. And such an interesting and unique concept. It was so well-written and displayed such a beautiful emotion. Very impressive... 5/5

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Spirit ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-15

OMG
I love love love the ironic ending. This poem has a small light-hearted-ness about it, making it diffenent from all the other dark poems in your collection. It's refreshing to see an artist go slightly out of there own box every once in a while. Usually when people try new things the poems come out good, but not great. I believe that you handled the transition beautifully and with natural ease.

This poem may not have perfect rhyme but the flow more than makes up for that. Each stanza melts into the other one making it all the more easy to read.

the only thin negetive that I can think to say would be, I wish you had a few more lighter-hearted poems.

5/5
thanks for the read>~Spirit~>



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