Comments - Forever (Written in 4 letters and a conversation)

robin milford ( F P C D ) at 2008-05-27

This is a very sad compelling write I enjoyed it never read a poem sat up like this before it was neat very different

Fallingawayfromu ( F P ) at 2008-06-02

Tears were leaving my eyes as I read this. The words are powerful and the message is clear. It was amazingly well written =) X.x Arielle

pretty lady aka lily ( F C D ) at 2008-06-02

I love this poem...its really sad but easily to follow i was in tears by the time i was done

FinalXBreathX ( F P C ) at 2008-06-16

Wow nothing ever quite has touched me that that did...5/5 That was just amazing.

Jennifer ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-18

Dude, just by reading the FIRST letter this is going to go in my favorite poems. And that's something because I have nothing in my favorite poems right now. This is just so perfect and I've only read the first stanza! OMG!

Wow, I've written letter poems too, but that was back in the day when I was still becoming the writer I am today. You've inspired me to try this whole letter idea again. The rhyming scheme is perfect by the way along with consistent.

Wow, this poem is touching. There's so much emotion intact. The way you go back and forth about the history of these two people. Everything that has happened before. I'm just the third person reading their lives without a clue who they are. It's great.

Op, I finally found one flaw. The enough and love lines don't rhyme. Oh and here's another, flash through me head should be my head.

A few other rhyming issues in the convo part.

Oh my Soldier. This is great. The ending is just like jaw dropping. Applause for you. This is art. Five out of five though it deserves much much more.

Leap Of Faith aka Temps ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-18

Wow. This was one of the best poems I've read in a very long time. The rhyming was absolutely perfect! This poem was filled with thousands of emotions. A really nice job! XD 5/5

living dead ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-18

Wow that was amazing.keep it up.5/5

Spoken Silence ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-21

This was a sweet story. Sad very sad. I know how Joseph feels in a way. I had a past much like his. So I understand his lasts requests to Jessica. It was a good story.

lizzy at 2008-06-23

Wow, this was so great!
in a way i know how joseph feels. I have been there, and you cant find a reason to live, but somehow i made it through those times! this piece just has so much meaning! Great job!

Tina Carrr ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-24

That was just... amazing.
You are a wonderful poet, and your work is inspirational and touching. Keep it up....


Francessca ( F P C D ) at 2008-06-24

OMG it was a letter about true love and it was very sad and now am down . its just sad but they are together forever now. sad but great have to admit

Modern Day Cinderella ( D ) at 2008-09-12


Princess Emmi ( F C ) at 2008-09-20


this is sooo amazing!! and it was very well written..

Dear The Only Boy I Loved,
I'm crying my eyes out, I can't even say your name
But never could I hate you, even when you've extinguished life's flame
^^this part made me cry!!!

i know how both Joseph and Jessica feel, wow such an amazing poem.......


cZaRiNa ( F P C ) at 2008-10-12

i love the idea of using the letter...
OmG..that was so full of emotions...
very well written!!!..
5/5...!! ^_^

SashaMirage ( F P C ) at 2008-11-26

This was exellent! I didn't take my eyes away from the screen from the beginning to the last word. You captured many forms of emotions in this and the rhyme and flow were perfect. Great story. 5/5

JabberingBlues at 2009-01-07

This is amazing. Very unusual format and the flow is great. Your words provoke very powerful emotions...contradictory, both sad and happy and i'm quite speechless! great write 5/5

LivingARealDream ( F C ) at 2009-01-13

Awww, really sad, just made me feel like crying.
Please keep writing, i enjoy your poems this is only one that i continue to like.


Fallingawayfromu ( F P ) at 2009-01-28

This poem is amazing. I wanted to start crying while reading it. -Arielle

love drought melody ( F P C ) at 2009-03-03

Wow. powerful. beautifully written. im speachless.