Comments - Would you fall in love with me

Amanda ( F ) at 2008-10-27

I like this poem alot but im not really sure what ur saying thoe like wat dop u mean

um can u explain it?

Nema ( F C D ) at 2008-10-27

Aww that was soo sweet
I liked the way you didn't force the rhyme so much..it gave internal music to the piece =]
I loved the simplicity in your lines, and stanzas !
truly inspiring =]

Keeeep it up
xx

xKornxGirlx ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-27

I thought it was reallllly cute. =]
the only thing that got me was the second stanza: star and heart don't rhyme.

xKornxGirlx ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-28

Awe. <3 yes its definatly better. since you sort of made it into a question like you're asking her to love you instead of being super confident almost arogantly saying your going to fall in love no options. it makes it sweeter.
i like.
5/5 =]

Nema ( F C D ) at 2008-10-29

Oh Yeah now I got it...
that was a good change =]
but I have to say the other one was good too.
both are great !
well done

you know? I'd never change the concept of the poem once I wrote it...that was brave, lol

xx

Twist Of Fate ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-31

Lol this poem is beautiful. It is so sweet I can feel the love you have for this person in your words. also I love the ryming in it

Twist Of Fate ( F P C D ) at 2008-10-31

I put it in my fav poem list

Twist Of Fate ( F P C D ) at 2008-11-01

Lol i like the change it is very good

christine ( C ) at 2008-11-02

I LOVE this.
great job! :]

still madly in love with him ( F P C ) at 2008-11-02

AWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!! soo cute

Goth marionette ( F P C D ) at 2008-11-03

What a wonderful title!!..
I think if anyone was given such a poem,She would fall in love wz u;);)..
I liked the repetition that u used and I think the flow was good..
Great job;)
Keep it up;)5/5

NELLIE at 2011-06-27

Oh yes totally ..lol :)