Comments - Hide and Seek for Lovers

Beautiful Chaos ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-14

Once again a beautifully penned poem. I especially enjoyed the ending.

"I close my eyes as if to count to ten.
Intentionally allowing you to slip from sight,
Unsure if I will discover you once more.

And you hesitantly withdraw,
Unsure if I will open my eyes to find you. "

Almost ringing to the quote "If you love something set it free" You don't know if it will return, but you close your eyes and continue the game anyhow.

I am definitely going to have to add you to my favorites. Great job!

Cara ( F P C ) at 2009-01-15

This was a really indepth poem.. under the comparisons of childish games, was hurt and despair i felt. You really were creative with this poem and i really enjoyed reading it. The flow was good which added a great deal to the poem. I am really glad i read this.. it was a terrific piece. The ending was very good. Keep up the great work!

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-17

This stuff really grabs attention but we got to get to a larger pond

great work

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-17

I can really relate to this a free verse is much more popular than rhyming poem
but you ust understand that many critics on this site are not the kind that buy bui the tinme is well spent because they are our costumers in thier own right

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-17

Absolutely the free flow and word choice is the kind of writing I would expect t read in something I bought please try to understand this is a highly competitive art that requires promotion which is very difficult and low votes is a product of ignorance yet the high vote should no be taken lightly

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-19

Congrats on your win :)
Take Care Cindy

love drought melody ( F P C ) at 2009-01-20

This is amazing. truly heartfelt and beautiful. amazing,

debbylyn ( F P C D ) at 2009-01-20

Congrats on the win....lovely poem!

victoria at 2009-01-21


Ashurii Rayne ( F P C ) at 2009-01-21

This poem was extremely creative. i was amazed as i read every word. very poetic and the title was perect. job well done. 5/5.


mysterious ( C D ) at 2009-01-21

I absolutely just love this peom...!!!
it is so simple yet so deep, and truth behind every word.

capturedelight at 2009-01-26

Absolutely brilliant!! I could connect with your poem on several levels, a lovely read.