Comments - When My Grip Fails For Just A Moment.

Maple Tree ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

Damn......just beautiful

Mr Darcy ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

Your heart feels like a surgeon slicing through nerves with a rusty scalpel.

Ben, (got it!!) Your word choice is superb, describing how desperately your heart yearns.

Your methods maybe unorthodox, but self-flaggelation is to my mind under rated.

Well done.


P.s. if you want to borrow my cat o' nine tails, just ask!!

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

What a gem!! When reading something so beautiful it gives you goose bumps like when hearing a beautiful song, just wow.


Everlasting ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-01

No offense intended, but I was expecting to read something gore and that made me cringe? ( i don;t know which word to use) plus something that made me scream.

P.s. XD I read Mr. Darcy's comment first... and it lured me to the poem, hence, my mind was too bias as to what to expect. ( Guilty, I enjoy reading his comments when he comments XD)

As far as the poem goes, it's a beauty.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-02

Boom! This so beautiful. ..

this stanza such a tastefully sweet choice of words. ..
I see myself in you and you in I,
cut from the same star, on the same path,
hand in hand through galaxies of memories
and more to be born.......

I will wait for more of your piece.
have a great time.


Sir Lancelot ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-02

And I will love you just as the sun loves the sea at sunset


You come up with lines like this effortlessly, old chap. It really is rather annoying, lol

Wonderful write, Ben and great to see new stuff from you.