Comments - Fly with me (Concrete Form)

Sir Lancelot ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-03


This is an excellent concrete or shape poem. They are always harder than they seem anyway, but they are especially challenging on this site because of its restrictions with formatting.

Well done,


Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-03

Hi Sir,

Actually, I'm still editing this as of this moment . and till now I can't figure out what's wrong.
But still ,thank you for the compliment.


Everlasting ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-04

-----------hard ------------------
----------to read. --------------
-------Ah! My heart! ------------
-----Is it broken in half?--------
---Or wait, can it just be---------
----upside ....... down?----------

Nice read. At first I had a hard time reading the poem. I wonder if it's because I'm reading via phone rather than laptop? In the bottom portion of the poem, letters are all too closed. And my brain didn't know how to read them XD then it did, somehow.

I like the poem.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-05


thanks even this writing gave you a headache. ... actually in my laptop it looks different. I dunno why ....Been editing this in notepad and Ms word. .. The problem is, when I transferred it here....anyway thanks you made it ...hahahhahahah. .


Brenda ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-05

Very cool! I liked this a lot- these concrete poems are difficult, well done-

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-05

Hi Brenda,

thanks for having time reading my poem. ...

have a blessed day. .


Autumn Breeze ( C D ) at 2016-09-09

Ate Gel. Kmasta ka

This is very nice poem, I really liked the first segment. I will give you some suggestions related to your poems later. But you are doing very nice. Gel

Loved the flow and rhythm of this lovely write.

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-09

Hi Lil Bro,

I'm fine (ikaw kumusta)? hope you're doing great. .. yes dear you give your comments, suggestions, observations and violent reaction. ...hahaha feel free

Ate Gel.