Comments - Secrets

ether ( F P C D ) at 2016-09-21

Now I like this one even more.

I'm not usually one for lighthearted love poetry, I like ones that highlight the uncertainty of new love. And this does it beautifully without coming across as too solemn. The initial stages of getting to know someone on that deeper level are both exciting and terrifying as we try to navigate how much we should tell them about our inner workings, and when is the appropriate time to do so.

Your structure, punctuation, vocabulary, flow; everything in this is beautiful.
"The consequence of hesitation" - such a powerful ending and a very thought provoking sequence of words.

I love this so much I'm nominating it for the weekly contest. So it goes without saying, 5/5.

LapisLazuli at 2016-09-22

Thank you so much, Ether, for sharing your thoughts! I really appreciate your words knowing that my work is relevant to the readers!

Also, I always believed that a weeping heart is conjures greater emotions.