Comments - Twas written in the stars (Tanka)

Ben Pickard ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02


This is beautiful. I do not yet know much about tanka (I will look at your link in a minute) but I know that they are regarded as 'feminine' forms and are ancient Japanese poems that were often written for ladies of the court or some such. Also that uppercase letters and punctuation should be kept to a minimum (if at all) and the subject is now non-specific.
This is a lovely, warm and romantic tanka that would have graced the courts of any country in any time.

Take care,


ps 'moonlight' I think.

Mr Darcy ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02

Thanks Ben. The link is rather excellent - I have added it to my bookmarks.

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02

Michael, this is a brilliant tanka. I still need to be more clued up on then like many other forms and as I said to Ben when he wrote his first that I have tried them before and just discarded them.

A truly magical piece of love.


Brenda ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-02

Michael, such a lovely write. I really liked the form you used also. So much said in so few lines, really nice-

Golden anGel Rhapsodist ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-04

Hello Sir Michael,

I love the title of this, very catchy that the readers won't let this skip their eyes...A perfect Tanka with 5-7-5-7-7 syllables and unforced message.
Great write Sir.
A 5/5 for this


Koan ( F C D ) at 2016-10-06

So sweet! Loved it!!!!!

phil at 2016-10-06

Perfect tanka my friend

Ingrid ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-08

Dear Michael,

What a delightful Tanka you have penned here!
The words set the mood and yes, sometimes a new beginning can be 'in the air' and we just know it will happen.

Well done in this romantic verse!

Take care,

(((hugs))) xx Ingrid

Kate Hicks ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-09

Beautifully written, loved it.

ether ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-10

Wow this is truely beautiful. Congratulations on the well deserved win.

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-10

Congratulations on the win my baldy bud :)

Brenda ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-10

Michael, Congratulations on a well deserved win. Beautiful Tanka.

Naughtymouse ( F P C D ) at 2016-10-10

This is amazing I love it! Congratulations on the win definitely should be on the front page :))

saggi at 2016-10-12

Love it.each line has given me goose bumps.touched and just deeply touched.

innocent chalera ( F ) at 2016-10-13


Trish at 2016-10-14