Comments - Moments in Mind

misstress ( F C D ) at 2006-10-04

Very thought provoking poem you have here angel.
Good Write.

Keep on writing on what you feel and like.

God Bless!

I wanna L your V--// ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-04

Ohhh...Creative, Unique. Flows well, wording is good. Hrmm. I liked it. Good job. ^^

Shattered Heart♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-04

Awww this is really sad.
i really like this poem a lot.
you did a wonderful job writing it.
you have talent.
keep writing 5/5

♥ .J.є.ѕ.ѕ.у. ♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-07

Awhh, that was really sweet.. It flowed well, teh descriptions were good and the love really shone through.. Great job sweetie, keep up the excellent work! 5/5

© shadowspoet ® ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-07

Beautiful poem you potray here, its simply but writing well with beautiful emotions, well done!

Fairytales ( F C ) at 2006-10-08

It's sooooo good, my gosh, it was amazing!!! You did SUCH a good job!!! *hugz*

Robie ( F C D ) at 2006-10-08

Thats a very nice poem!
the love in it was flowing the whole time
keep it up!

Shattered Heart♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-09

Wow very sad poem, but i really like it a lot. i can relate to it. the flow was really nice. and the rhyming was amazing! keep writing! 5/5


Letty.... ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-21

Another wonderful write hun! I'm glad I added you to my favorites so that I can keep up with your beautiful poems. You have a wonderful talent for love poems. You put strong and deep emotion into each word so that the reader can really see that the words come from the heart. Keep up the wonderful work. 5/5


Ashley Paul ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-21

Great poem! You really did an awesome job! 5/5

Brittney Schmelter ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-22

Pretty good, I my favorite stanza is:
You have forgiven me
And even showed your smile
I just felt so happy
Because its been a while
Your rhyming is excellent,
Great Job

Tara-Kay ( F C D ) at 2006-10-22

That was good, better than the other one, although it still seemed a little rocky where the flow was concerned buyt a good read overall. keep it up

F A - I Cant Be Perfect!! ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-22

I really liked this. Great flow. Love the last stanza. Love the emotian. You write great love poems! Its great! Keep them up! xx

Bridgette ( F P C D ) at 2006-10-22

I loved this! The last stanza left me completely speechless. You wrote this very well and it seems well thought out. The emotions that you captured were portrayed very well and the poem overall was amazing! 5/5

HiddenxSoul ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-01

Oh I really enjoyed this. The flow was excellent. I also loved the way you ended it, it really rounded the whole poem off. Good job.

Lauren:x♥x ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-02

Lil' prob-
begun-began, or had begun

Alas.i like that word.

to tell the truth i did not know this had an abab rhyme scheme until this stanza
For I knew you were there
To be with me always
No doubt I felt the care
Shown by your gentle face

and this stanza kinda broke it!
face and always do not rhyme because the beats they land on inthe P meter. or w/e. i would try to adjust this stanza

Overall very well penned.

x3 Lauren

Cassandra Wojick ( C ) at 2007-02-03

I really liked this, great job. youre truly talented.

Shinobi ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-25

A really good poem, rhymes and stanza's express each a unique meaning. A touching story with another great ending 5/5

CathyButterflyJC ( F P C D ) at 2013-01-05

The whole poem was building me up and then the last verse melted me all down and took it all out of me, I really enjyoed reading it, I love how you had your emotions consumed in each world, bravo bravo